Reviews for Trouble in Paradise
Guest chapter 1 . 7/16/2012
Nice... will have to keep my eye out for updates on this...
Zombie-fan chapter 1 . 7/10/2012
Nice start. Got one or two problems with it:

"his short black hair messy." Do you mean "His short black hair was messy?"

"4 stars, bitches!" Write it as four. Just me man. Makes it looke neater.

Other than that, brillinat start. Maybe I should check out freddyburn. :)