|Reviews for Cherished|
| Dianaartemis chapter 1 . 8/8/2012
The imagery is fabulous. The whole second stanza is full of amazing vivid images. The last two lines are incredibly strong and well paced. I would consider placing the 'and' of the second to last line into the last line. -I will reach for you/ and I will reach for you.- Just a thought, not really necessary.
What I would like is more clarity on the actors in this poem. There are four, 'I' 'you' 'it' and 'God'. I would recommend cutting out one of them. Mostly because 'it' gets really confusing by the end. I assume 'it' is 'this love', but it gets lost by the second stanza. Keep it more clear in the meaning. I also wasn't sure who 'you' was. I assume it is a general plural use of 'you'. I wish you could combine 'it' and 'you' to make a stronger, closely joined poem.
Sorry if none of that made sense, but I really like this poem and I wanted to comment!
| Sasha chapter 1 . 7/23/2012
God loves everyone whom you paint so skillfully in this poem and I know He loves the entire world because of John 3:16.
| Punslinger chapter 1 . 7/11/2012
Starkly beautiful, as a naked poem should be. You have
an unsettling knack for making us confront our
unclothed inner selves as you strip your own soul.