Reviews for Secrets: The Comet League
Lock Ells chapter 31 . 6/23/2013
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p.s. I think I kinda like this fanfiction, and I would kind of like to read more.
steph135 chapter 31 . 11/5/2012
0.0 griffon...oh you're gonna pay. mike will KILL you! ugh! i hate him so much! im glad mike found them though in time before griffon would...well, "creep". this was quite the nail-bitter though, very intense. i could practically hear griffons chillingly over suave voice as he sat their on the stair well...(shivers) kill him shadow wolf. just kill the guy. hes a good addition and your doing an amazing job creating his character but i just hate the guy so much. can mike just, well you know, run him over with something? lol i dont kow, but your the genius author and your the one who knows what should happen. i really want to know how this is gonna end and yet i dont because that would mean it's over :( please, for the sake of the fan, post soon!
-steph135
steph135 chapter 30 . 11/5/2012
:) YES! well, im finally content! that was so incredibly sweet! the whole conversation leading up to the kiss was just perfect...wow and mike with the picutre of her family, that was just so amazing that he would go to all that troble to get it for her and to set up that whole night just for them. he is truly a great person, esspecvially to his beloved roxy lol. this is what i wanted! everything, the whole build up to their little relationship is just great and so well put together. i may have mentioned this before but i hate when a relationship in a book goes really fast. i mean, it just makes it seem so forced and unrealisic. congrats on staying true to the charaters :P i wish i could just go on and on a rant all day but i have to get of the computer. please post more soon!
steph135 chapter 29 . 11/5/2012
:) awww that so cute. i love how she explained that her mind knew instantly but it took a while to get her mouth to react to his little movie date offer. shes so lucky! not when it comes to griffon though...ugh. that little jerk face. i want to drop kick that little...(shakes head) anyways, i like the descrption in the last paragraph when she says that mike filled the empty space next to her with his sweet and easy going presense. i just love that. when your with someone you care about, thats how its suppose to feel. they fill some kind of void. great work! welp, time for the next chappie chap! :P
steph135 chapter 28 . 11/5/2012
wow, that dream was sad. i though it was a good touch though, just one more thing to give alittle background on her life and to show how much shes missing her family. :P ha i liked the drugged roxyy, that was realistic and made it pretty funny. mike is so sweet to her! (sigh) i love their relationship and its progressing at a great pace. not to fast, not to slow, its just right. not much else to say other than onto the next one! :D
-steph135
steph135 chapter 27 . 11/5/2012
poor roxy! to be honest, im alittle diapointed that there wasnt full on battle between her and the monster, but thats okay, you know what your doing lol :P
its so sweet that they were all helping her through the pain and dressing her wound and all that. it shows the relationship she has with all of them, esspecially mike. i love it ;P i hope mike kisses her soon. please post another!
-steph135
ALovelyAsianxx chapter 27 . 11/4/2012
What the heck. This is so crazy! Poor Roxy! She gets hurt entirely too much!): all this action is making me giddy!
These few chapters were sooooo good!(: this is getting so intense! Well it always was but..yanno. Well I love this(: you're great(:
Kthxbai(:
steph135 chapter 26 . 11/4/2012
nice descriptions in this one! as i read that first paragraph i felt like i was there out in the wilderness, fearing for my life. the fact that she was laughing actually reminded me of a short story..i cant remember the name but it was about this guy in the vietnam war and...never mind, i'd rather talk about the book!
(sigh) that little moment she had with mike...:) your so good at those. you pick every sense and involve it with what she thinking. this is great becuase it helps give the reader an even clearer idea of what's going through her mind. i also like how you describe the formation and all that technical stuff, becuase even though we're talking about monsters here its cool that you can still make it realistic. oh! and lets not forget that action with the monster! awwwww yeah! you know i like my action! im mean just reading that made me nervous! like, right when she explains how she would be able to look back and hear the shouts from mike, joe and tom. you did a great job describing the feeling of getting attacked as well! and right when she stabbed it and when she could feel it sinking in, and...oh man :P that was just great. just great. this chappter had so much going for it. good, no, AMAZING job! XD
-steph135
steph135 chapter 25 . 11/4/2012
0.0 wow...intense. level three? dang, like the thing that attacked her the first time! is it weird that im scared? im shaking alittle bit. i feel like such a dork lol. oh well, it's a good thing and it means that im relating :P
im sorry this isnt much of a review, im kinda typing fast cause im want to see what happens. well, onto the next chapter!
-steph135
steph135 chapter 24 . 11/3/2012
awww another shortie chappie! its so cute! :P hehe anyway, good job on this one!
poor roxy! griffons-a-creepin! i like that you added that though, it kinda showed how she feels safe with mike, not nervous around him which means she doesnt just have a crush on him, she really likes him and feels comfortable with him as a opposed to how she feels around griffon the creeper (thats his name from now on!)
i also think it's a good idea to show that shes getting tougher, becuase if she kicks some guys butt, as a writter, you have a perfectly good excuse for making that plausable :P yup.
another thing you did that was great was that you showed her missing her family again! that was perfect! esspecially her brother with the dimples, that just plain adorable and puts a good picture in your head of what he must be like.
wow she lucky. a AR-15 for her birthday! XD
ohhhhhh cliff-hangger! i love it! i want to knoww hat happens to those kids that get called during class and at lunch! i've been wondering that for a while! please post soon!
-steph135
steph135 chapter 23 . 10/26/2012
awww this is a shortie chapter! well i guess thats okay, im just glad i get to read so more of it :D

okay, so most of this was just the typical informational stuffs but like i've said before, it makes the big dramatical (pretty sure i just made up a knew word :P) chapters even more amazing. i feel like something big is going to happen soon, maybe alittle action? hehehe i hope so. or a scene with roxy and mike where they kiss or something! im really enjoying reading this and im glad you found time to write alittle more! please continue soon! :D
-steph135
ALovelyAsianxx chapter 22 . 10/14/2012
Oh. My. Goodness. I cannot tell you how much i love love love this story! The whole plot line and everything is crazy and just so exciting i can't even get over it! And i love the way roxy and mike are so close already. I can't wait to read more, please update soon!
steph135 chapter 22 . 10/7/2012
yup. this is it. this is exactly what i was talking about! you took my advice of making roxy think about her family and all that nostlagia (i think that's how it's spelled) stuffs and you turned it into a way to bring roxy and mike closer. you made it fit perfectly to, in a way that helped it make the characterization go right along. this did so many good things for the story; a softer side of mike, and brung out roxy's super emotional side it more realistic by showing how a person would think after being seperated from there family for so long mike and her a chance to deepen their little relationship. a little drama...who doesnt like drama? (when reading only!) it was great, it was really great. ESSPECIALLY THE LAST PARAGRAPH! so sweet! (sigh) that was just awesome, and nicely written :P

okay, now that im done ranting about the best part, i will talk about the begining; that would be awful. so embaressing! ugh i would hate that! she handled it pretty well though but i guess that would be the only way to handle something like that. well, i think my reviewing job here is done :P

-you know who i am
steph135 chapter 21 . 10/6/2012
hey it's me! it turns out that when you said i should check my email for a new chapter, you meant a comet league one! no way!

i like that this chapter's main setting's in a gun range! that's pretty awesome. the AR-15 is a beautiful gun by the way. did you have to do any gun research for this one? oh and the last paragraph is awesome! in a way, it kinda summed up where their relationship (friendship, crushship, whatever you would like to call it) is and it kinda showed how their little dynamic goes. it was well put and it was a great ending to the chapter.

there was one grammar mistake that i found and i know this is really petty, but i might as well tell you. if you dont want me to do this just tell me in a pm. some people dont like others to correct this stuff. so if you dont want me to next time i wont. bye-bye! XD

1. 4th paragraph 4th: did you mean done instead of do?

-steph135
steph135 chapter 20 . 10/6/2012
you said this ones boring but i dont think so. im one of those people who mind those kinds of chapters becuase i know they are essential. so anyway, onto the important stuff...

the head guy, you know the one who runs the whole thing? well, he scares me. the part when he smiles at her in the crowd...(shivers) and how he was so direct with her when he explained the thing about the boys. ugh. he scares me. he's just a frighting guy. i feel like he will have a big role in the future though, which is great. it's making me curious...other then that though, i am honestly a little jelous of roxy but at the same time i feel bad. that would be so overwhelming. i love that mike is getting protective, its awesome! one little piece of advice; i wish she would talk about her family more. i dont know, i just think she would miss them alittle more or something but thats all the critisim i have. i like the begining to. i love the awkward moments between mike and roxy. you know the whole i-like-you-you-like-me-but-we-wont-admit type of thing. oh! its just beautiful. i love that kind of tention in books. so please, for the sake of you little fan KEEP ON WRITING!
-steph135
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