Reviews for his mind is in orbit
madame matryoshka chapter 1 . 7/17/2012
wow, this is interesting. i like the metaphors - "he's a broken clockwork android" asdfghjkgdf.
also, i love how you used some newspeak in there (i think you used newspeak?) i'm a total sucker for that sort of thing.
ayuke chapter 1 . 7/16/2012
You can almost feel the pain this man endured, as he never seems to find happiness. The last 7 lines of this work really get me. They really sell it all. The last line is just so effective and does the job in wrapping it up to a close, as you begin to see the way this man is thinking and feeling.

Great job!
Guest chapter 1 . 7/16/2012
i love the repetition of that flutterlashes, palest blue —