Reviews for false lights
anachronistic chapter 1 . 7/16/2012
i love the breathy rushy feeling in the first three (?) lines. i think the lack of punctuation really works there. nitty gritty electric eyes is a cute phrase.
ayuke chapter 1 . 7/16/2012
This is unbelievably deep and emotional.
Your diction certainly adds a unique feel to the things you say.
"rusting for him" .. "nothing but dust" ... "electric eyes"
What really stood out to me was the way you end the first two lines with "she" and continue on to the next line. I get the impression of her longing, and her cruel end she will soon face, as love seems to be coming to an inevitable doom.

Well done! :3