Thanks for the new chapter (part 1)! Now Chris is trying to steal Jon away or something? That won't do D:

I would have liked to see Jon and Roman get busted but they had the right idea to stop before getting ahead of themselves. I am going on a gut feeling that the drama club will be shocked to find out they are together.

I read currently all 31 chapters, Kiksebof, and I must say this had caught my attention the second I started reading without realizing it until the tenth chapter. Despite how the story not being as structured as a novel -not that I'm complaining- this is a really great homosexual story between males. If it gets noticed on a somewhat national level, I think you would be getting a trophy for it, that is my opinion on how well thought out it is.

Love Your story :)
I can't wait to See (read xD) how their relationship will develop!

This story is perfect for teens 16 and under. There are just to many grammar mistakes and weird sentencing that makes this too much of a bother to try and read. Plus this story's plot is extremely overused by writers. My question is when people will start to realize that and think of different story idea to write.

Is jon gonna cheat on roman ? And what's with tylor anyway ? he's so jumpy !

OMG this chapter was the best yet! I don't know if that's weird for me to say but it's true... You're a phenomenal writer! I can't wait for the next chapter!

I prefer to write my reviews while I read.

So far, my only issue is your lack of punctuation. There was a sentence and you started a new one without a period. (Or a comma would have sufficed, in the very least to show an attempt.)

"My name is Jonathan Joseph Black I am a football player..."

There should have been a period after the name.

There are quite a few other errors regarding your lack of punctuation. Another review beat me to it, hopefully you can find the errors yourself and it helps you grow.

-bR0k3N

oh my gosh that was adorable! im so done right now i just cant! im so glad she reacted that way... i probably would to if i ever had a son who did that... lol id be soooo happy! thanks so much for updating! it was adorable!

oh, by the way... its maria! i finally made an account... lol youre welcome. loves ya, potato c:

I for one love your story the way it is and i really can't wait to read next chapter

Reeally love this story, keep up the good work. I think your style, grammar and vocab is improving quite steadily :)

c: I'm so happy to updated! I like this chapter a lot lol thank you so much YOU NEED TO UPDATE IT MORE OFTEN BABY I LOVES YA C:
Love ya potato c:

I like the story so far, and the character development that came with it and the fact that the romance didn't all happen at once and you slowly eased yourself into it. :) Might I say though, periods/commas might be good when you're doing dialogue.

Yay! I can't tell you how happy this makes me! Great writing, and I can't tell you how much I squeaked when he told roman to be his bf lol :D
Update soon! :D :*

Your suspicion is most accurate ;)