Great chapter! A few grammar errors and occasionally weird syntax, but definitely improving! Can't wait for the next update :D

I think your grammar and spelling is improving a little bit, though it still needs to be worked on. Hope you upload again soon!

Gah! Another wait! When are they finally gonna get together? :P Really enjoying the story so far, keep up the good work but maybe try to double check grammar and spelling? :)

Yay, new chapter! It was good, can't wait to see what happens next! :)

Despite a few discrepancies and the need for a beta, I'm really enjoying this story :) Please update soon!

I've only read this chapter so far but there was a point or two I wanted to make (which you may have already fixed, who knows).

From my readings, both here and in published novels, I've gathered that there are a few punctuation rules to follow.

Not right: "I like corn and beef" Noah said to his many animals on the Ark.

Right: "I like corn and beef," Noah said to his many animals on the Ark.

The difference is the comma.

You have this option as well...

Jose looked at his friends and announced, "I think I love pizza!"

Still, note the comma use.

And another thing...make sure you end your sentences with some sort of punctuation. You do well with the questions and exclamations but when it's just a simple statement like "I love you" remember to add a period.

EX. "It was nice meeting you, Jonathan, but I really must get back now."

Hope I've helped a little bit !

(And: The advice I give to people is to look at other published authors, or popular ones here, and really look at how they write. Don't copy their story and plot of course, but see how they form their sentences and how the grammar and punctuation falls into it. You learn a lot!)

If he can drive to the game and school why can't he drive to the party?