Reviews for The Reincarnated Olympians |
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![]() ![]() ![]() like it very much im wondering if hecate is still open |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I'll make sure to check it out :) Can't wait to read more! Please keep writing and update soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() good job on your story! :) |
![]() ![]() OC for: Hermes Hey. I came up with a OC. Name: Jordan Nickname: Dan Age: 17 Height: 5'8 Hair: Blond kinda longish Eyes: Blue Backstory: His mother ran out on him and his father when he was 7 and they have been on their own ever since. His mother works late so he is mostly on his own. Normal Clothing: 1. Jeans, layered tee shirt, tattered tennis shoes, and he always has his iPod on him. 2. Black tattered jeans, the same tennis shoes, tee shirt, and iPod. Formal Clothing: Black Pants, White button-down shirt, Nice shoes, and a jacket. Attitude: He is nice, but kinda an outcast. He tends to talk too much when he is nervous and is really supportive. THANKS! This is a cool story, but it's a bit hard to follow. I don't really get who is supposed to be talking and such. update soon. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh! I can't wait for more! Please keep writing! I want to see when others show up! Update soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm excited to see the backstory! But try to work on the conversations. If you just take a look at the conversation, it's always like... "Something something." He said. "Lalalala." She said. You don't need those "he said"/"she said" for every dialogue line. If the conversation is between just two people, readers are able to figure out who's speaking by the way conversations are formatted. A: blah B: lala A: dooby B: meh so on and so forth. Try not to use tags for every single line of dialogue. Also, in some lines of dialogue, you are missing punctuation at the end. Try not to forget that! But I'm excited to see what's next. |
![]() ![]() Hey, i read a little bit of you story and its really good but Tyler and Sarah (Apollo and Hestia) being twins doesn't make sense. Artemis and Apollo were the twins. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm so excited for this story! Cant wait for the next update :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Dionysus: Name- Korinne (Core-in) Nickname- Kore (Kor-A) Normal/Formal Clothing- Outfit 1:tattered jeans, long brown leather vest with hidden pockets on the inside to hid her flask, white/gray or green tank top underneath vest and simple sandals. Outfit 2: dyed red jean shorts with band logos all over them, black band tee shirt and signature vest, two different color knee length socks and simple black chuck taylors. Formal outfit:(she does not do skirts or dresses) white skinny jeans, powder blue long lace gloves that go past her elbows, knee high black boots, minature top hat clip and corsetted purple and black top. Appearance- long, curled, wine red hair with shaved sides, eyes the color of brandy(gold), and pale skin. Svelte as a dancer and, when not stumbling around drunk, has the grace of a cat. Personality/Background- She is a bit of an alcoholic, always has something on her and she is a smoker(weed and hooka). She keeps a flask of her favorites in the pocket of her vest, which she is ALWAYS wearing. She has some inner demons, which she would rather not talk about. She has developed a duel personality through the Darkness, an abusive, rage filled side which she keeps locked up with alcohol(in truth it is her true side; godly side, whom unfortunately also has a duel personality). She tries to act like a stupid, drunken, lazy sloth, but its just a front that she hides behind. She is a university grad, graduated college at the age of seventeen and has a degree in nuclear chemistry. She is sort of rocking punk/goth drummer chick meets romantic psychopath. She follows her favorite band: Esctasy Gods, religiously. She is rough and tumble to the core and hates being underestimated. She is the girl you do not want to come across in a back alley. She is earthly and nomadic, not having any roots, no one knows where she came from. She does not talk about having family. Unfortunately for her, she attracts the psychos as well and always has some raving lunitics trying to be her best friends. She is charming when she wants to be- even sometimes when she doesnt. Sexuality- Pansexual; sexually attracted toward any gender idenity. "gender-blind" (anyone who is willing to take on her crazy) How she discovers she is a reincarnation of Dionysus- She is hanging out at a wild party with some underground band and their groupies, when a group of women take her by the hands and start dancing her around like a little marinette. She is enchanted by them and cannot look away. They dance all night, go back to her current residence(hotel suite) and make love on the spot. She wakes to find the women are gloriously beautiful and terrifying at the same time. She is speechless(which does not happen often). They explain to her that they are the Fates: the three women that control the lives of mortals and they are looking for the reincarted Gods of Olympus. They give her the lifeblood of her original life: Dionysus, and she sees the images of her previous life flash before her eyes. *I think that she should date/be wed to the Hades character because they would be the perfect pair and I am tired of Hades going after the flower child of Demeter who has her head so far up her mother's butt she cannot see her own stupidity. Change whatever you want and keep whatever you decide. I would like to be informed if you decide to keep anything. Character design is one of my favorite parts of writing. :) If you ever need any characters ideas let me know. I really enjoyed this one. |
![]() ![]() ![]() If you don't already have an OC for Athena, I'd love to put in my OC for her. Name: Crystina Lemard Nickname: Crys or Tina Normal Clothing: Red blouse (short sleeves, white ivy design detail around collar) and blue jeans or black "Read to Live" t-shirt and skinny grey jeans. Formal Outfit: Red knee-length halter dress with a layered skirt, black 2" heel. Appearance: shoulder-length blonde hair, blue-green eyes Personality: Loner, Introverted, emotionally scarred, master at debate, strategist - Masquerades as a kind and friendly girl Background: Family deserted her as a 6-year-old leaving her on the steps of a family friend; she enjoys challenging her mind with expert puzzles, chess, go (Japanese game played on a board with stones), and debates. How she finds out who she is: She starts viewing herself as Athena in the Greek Olympiad when she reads stories about them. When she really knows is when she starts to put the Greek Gods & Goddesses to other people she knows. Sexuality: Straight. Other: She's always reading, writing, playing chess, doing puzzles, debates. Always trying to expand her knowledge and her mind. |