|Reviews for Home, Sweet Home|
| Anxious Axolotl chapter 1 . 7/20/2012
Haha, this story made me laugh! Poor Nathan...
Your story flows really well, except I feel like the constant changing of POV interrupts it too much. As soon as I was beginning to joy a character's POV, it changed! Maybe just think about using less POVs/changing POV less often? I don't really see why you felt the need to swap to third person in the middle of Leila's POV (or even to write in any other POV BUT Leila's) as it just seemed to interrupt the wonderful scene/s you had going.
Looking forward to the next installment!