Reviews for Operation Z : Intro
11's-SevenofHearts chapter 1 . 7/23/2012
First off, "somethings" is two separate words. Besides that, this introduction is particularly uninteresting because there's nothing that makes it stand out from all of the far-too-many zombie apocalypse stories in existence. Already, your story seems awfully cliche. You say you love the genre, so you should realize how common your introduction sounds. There's really not much of a hook to it.
Also, you really need a better synopsis than "please tell me what you think of this" if you want to draw in readers. The lack of capitalization in that sentence alone is enough of a turn-off, for me personally at least.
I hope this helps.