Reviews for Tricks of the Mind
RobMacabreOfficial chapter 1 . 7/27/2012
This was an interesting concept, and was written well for what it was. I have a few suggestions. Firstly, in the beginning you mention the man is young, then mention he has graying hair. While I understand you may have been implying stress was causing his hair to gray early, you may want to mention this for clarification. Secondly, There is a fine
line between withholding detail to create an air of suspense and not adequately describing something. I believe the latter applies to the ending of this story. I believe more detail is needed to flesh out the main character and thus provide the shocking ending you we're evidently going for. Whether the creature was a figment, a hallucination, or an actual metamorphosis to how this story would be perceived by the reader, and I believe that withholding this works to the detriment of this story.