Reviews for Schism
Myshu chapter 9 . 4/8/2013
I've decided I like Karoly and his... potent imagination. XD
The mannequin fight was a riot, and it was thrilling to read how different parts of the house turned on themselves (those floorboards, ouch), though the glass phoenix was a spectacular note to end on. The man makes a very interesting point about juxtaposing horror and beauty-and that's why I like your stories. ;)
Myshu chapter 8 . 3/3/2013
Whoa, I wasn't expecting an action sequence! Especially not one so zany as that house. I like how deftly the rookie handled all the mayhem, especially the fight with the suits of the armor. I wonder if he'll get to solve the riddle of the house, or even find Zachary?
Myshu chapter 7 . 2/18/2013
It's fun meeting more of our narrators crazy coworkers. Figures that they'd relax with a potentially crazy barkeep, as well. Also gotta love the way Zachary treats alcohol like a panacea-he might be on to something, there. XD
Myshu chapter 6 . 2/11/2013
Whoa, that's an incredible application of that technology! It would work wonders for medicine and all kinds of other fields. Not to mention the whole probing process seems as fun as the narrator thinks it is.
Meanwhile, good job at building up security with a very mysterious, ominous vibe. I can't wait to see what develops there.
Myshu chapter 5 . 1/23/2013
Pretty tricky system they've got going here. And now you make me want to watch Inception. XD
I think our narrator is rightfully suspicious, though it intrigues me more that he might have a unique mind that could be the key to unlocking some mysteries around here. Good luck with the next chapter!
Myshu chapter 4 . 12/21/2012
Occupational hazards, I see.
"...he's the best sort of bad example you could follow." Heh, ain't that the truth?

I like how the tone of this chapter slowly shifts from amazement to suspicion and dread. Nothing scarier than being trapped like that at the end. Can't wait to see what secrets trip up our protagonist in the near future-provided he's okay after this!
Myshu chapter 3 . 11/15/2012
Ah, it's good to see Harding again. XD

I like how the second chapter led into the third, the story being introduced as a mundane morning with a lot of routine, and then slowing ramping into the abnormal and wondrous. It's like going down the rabbit hole. Now I'm really interested to see what applied neurology is all about, and of course, getting to know the colorful bunch of staff members working there (I think I'm going to like Marie.) You've always had a knack for fun characters. :P
Forgotten Sanity chapter 2 . 11/12/2012
Zomg. You updated! :O It's only been like FOREVER! (And I just realised that it's a completely different username over here. GUESS WHO I AM, BITCH! [Yeah, you've probably got it already.])

PORNSTAR APPEARS OVER HERE! But he's slightly different. Which means that you've gotten better at distinguishing your characters :P This one doesn't feel like NiceGuy and all the character's speech patterns are different and blah.

I like the fact you include useage of 'bloody' in this.

I can see why you found this a little difficult to write. I mean, it's interesting - but then again, so are all story-starts, when we know NOTHING about anyone, but it's not exactly amazing. I mean, the start is really interesting, and the whole thing about him waking up feeling like he's drowning again is pretty cool. It's like, you've started off really strong with this, but by the time you've gotten around to introducing everything else, you're as bored as your MC, lol. And I have no nickname for him as of yet :( [Also, why does he refer to Harding as a dude in his mental thoughts, yet get annoyed when Harding calls him a dude? (And this Harding gets a new nickname because he doesn't seem as PornStar-ish.)]

Explanation would be nice as to how they manage to charge you just by leaving the train. That whole little sequence bit reminded me of FF7 though, with the whole dart through the train to avoid the scanning detectors.

Why didn't third guard get a name? Poor nameless soul.

I have nothing else to say now. YOU'RE DISTRACTING ME FROM MY WORD COUNT!

Cru

(I know my name isn't Cru over here, but that's just so you know who I am :P That and I don't really have something to abbreviate this name to. Sanity just seems a bit too ironically funny. And FS sounds weird. Like porn-related weird. Facial Splatter? Lol.)

PS. Have you heard? They're going to be closing MSN soon. :(
Myshu chapter 1 . 7/30/2012
Ohhh, this set-up really gets one thinking, and the last blurb is particularly ominous. (And am I a nerd for even slightly comprehending that first one?)