Reviews for in the end
LittleLights chapter 1 . 8/6/2012
Amazing! Your adjectives really add to the imagery, and I love the sort of haunting mood that the overall message adds. Perhaps this would be better if it were either in shorter lines, or in more of a monologue form. That's just my opinion, though; It's fine how it is. My favorite lines are the last four because they really reinforce the whole theme and give me the idea that one day, today will seem so...fake. Anyway, great job! Keep writing :)
Sandwolf chapter 1 . 8/5/2012
the last five word do not sound quite right.i think this what you were trying to say," we have been waiting for".
AquariusGirl230191 chapter 1 . 8/1/2012
Love this.

I really like the last line "Perhaps we will smile." and also "chortling cacophony" - awesome use of alliteration there.

Great job.