|Reviews for The Lantern People|
| Dreamers-Requiem chapter 1 . 2/14/2013
I feel like a lot of this is quite jumpy. It moves too quickly from one thing to another, and some of it just gets a bit lost in that. I feel like it's a lot of telling, too, and as a story...I just feel that it doesn't quite work. Again, some of it is just a tad confusing, trying to keep track of everything that is going on at once. Maybe see if you could rework it into more of a story, and try to show the readers the story of the lantern people, rather than telling it so explicitly? It is an interesting concept, but I think some of the strongest bits just get a bit lost in the rest. Good luck.
| Brooke chapter 1 . 8/16/2012
Wow! That was awesome! You paint such a vivid picture with your words!
| I-am-a-Firefly chapter 1 . 8/14/2012
I love this!
It IS based on the Bible/Christianity, right?
If so, it manages to combine fable and gospel seamlessly.
Although you didn't mention that it was God who sent "Joshua". He was just born.