That was so good! It was really well-written and I felt like I was the girl. The length of the story just added to the effect. All the emotions and all were perfectly expressed. I loved it.

Smiles,
Chikni Chameli The Second

very creepy but well-written! the emotions you managed to pack in to such a short story is impressive.

It's interesting how you layered this story...at first I thought she was dying woke for a moment to see the women, but now I wonder if the woman was on the other side to meet her. I love how many possibilities and interpretations there are for such a short glimpse into your writing.

Is this what happened to the Little Match Girl?

Sorry, I'm rather rude at times. But, I do like it! Except I do have a piece of advice for you: it's spelled "one-shot", not "one-short". It may be a spelling mistake or it may be just a mistake because you thought it was spelled that way, but either way it's not "one-short".

-Hermie