Reviews for How To Be A Cross Dresser |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I don't like the opening paragraph. Mostly because you could've found a different way to open other than by addressing the reader. I don't know, I just think it's cheesy to address the reader. And also, teachers tell you to stop doing that once you get into Middle school, so maybe that's why I don't like it. Because teachers are right about that at least. I read the opening, and then the A/N... LOL AND YOU FAIL AT DAT INTERNET HEART. It's just a three. A three all alone. TT_TT Oh, well, I like Mean Girls too. It's hilarious. Some girls at my school though... actually take it seriously. /facepalm. Oh, and you mention Cracker pouting probably about three times. One time it was sulking though. GURL WE NEED TO GET IN CHECK HERE! ... LOL Wait, why did Lacey call Ryley? It seemed like a pointless conversation. Usually when two people don't really know each other, they don't call each other just to talk, plus they didn't even talk that long. You should've added just like some excuse to throw in there so it didn't seem only to further plot. (Because we all know that was the point. To invite her over and THEN THE PLOT MAY GO FORWARD AND AWAAAY. HOHOHO!) Favorite sentence time: [Or, rather, his psychic abilities, since I was allegedly a Y chromosome and all that.] DEM Y CHROMOSOMES. Oh my. So many things to say about that ending. FIRST OF ALL, DOESN'T HE HAVE MAROON HAIR NOW? Or did it go from Maroon to blue? I don't remember, but you might want to double check on that. ... LOL DELECTABLE HUNK OF MAN? Oh god. That happened fast. I think something should've happened instead of making it appear random like that. Instead of her being all, "Oh, what is this? I pissed you off and now I'm in love? Flutter Fluff Fuwa!" you should've made something happened where she fell in love. Like, let's say, he says something really sweet about her, like, "Oh my, Riley, you sortof remind me of a girl, but in a really good way! You're so sweet and kind, I could fall for you!" and then she'll be like, "Oh? Wow, that's so sweet. Who knew he could be so deep?" ... Not exactly but... okay. But I do like that last sentence. [I was beginning an infatuation with Ryan McKinley.] I just don't like how randomly she fell in love. Oh, and I just want to bring up the spacing here. It seems like some of the paragraphs are joined together? I think you're having format problems again. D: Took me forever to review this chapter. I procrastinate harder than that hoe on the corner. But, anyway, I think you were having updatephobia. You were all stressing out about updating, but you shouldn't be. Oh, and I'm going to PM you about NaNo. Because we gotta do it together! Good work! :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() . . . . Still amazing, very very amazing. A lot more drama is coming to town |
![]() ![]() ![]() Sweeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeet. Could u have he reveal her identity soon? |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm psyched to see how you'll play all this out! I want her to tell them she's a chick and then they'll keep her secret and let her stay in the band! ...but I want her not to tell them to Ryan continues to think he's gay! OMG. There's so much possibility for this story! What if the band knows she's a girl and then her and Ryan get together and then a camera guy gets a shot of the two of them kissing and then everyone thinks they're gay - omg. It's your story. Do with it what you will *heart* |
![]() ![]() ![]() Finally! I was dying for Riley to start liking Ryan. Ehehe Ryan... With the blue hair and stuff. Wonder what his real hair color is? Yay! It's an update! And it's ok if you don't update too frequently, as long as you still post :-) This chapter's pretty long, actually. Well, not long, but normal size. No worries :-D |
![]() ![]() ![]() Dang I really like the story so far and how you change the point of views and I was hoping you'd have at least a bunch of chapters out but this is pure awesome |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ah, two weeks...seems so far away. That's okay though, I'm willing to wait for updates :P Lacey's POV? She doesn't seem too awful, even though she's definitely not very nice. I feel so bad for poor Ryan, having a mean ex and a conflict about maybe liking Riley, except that's Riley's supposed to be a "guy." Hm...not much to say, honestly. Just keep it up! Lol, that sounds so cheesy. |
![]() ![]() ![]() AH PARKER, I LOVE HIMMM wow, I'm like...fangirling. This is new. Hilarious line/paragraph made my day: [Putting my phone on speaker, I shouted at Tristan the whole way to our studio. When I got there, I found a very disgruntled-looking Tristan pocketing his phone outside of the glass doors, waiting for me. He scowled bad-temperedly at me. "Shout a little louder, Ryan, I don't think the people in the North Pole have heard you quite yet," he said bitingly when I got out of my silver Caddie.] LOL he shouted the whole time, loved it. And Tristan's line about the North Pole? HILARIOUS. I died, I swear, I died. Keep it up, love this! |
![]() ![]() ![]() AAH cliffhanger! Whee! [He was twenty-three, but acted like a goddamn grandpa with a stick up his ass.] OMG, I totally burst out laughing at that one! And I had a mouthful of Gatorade in my mouth, so I literally sprayed energy drink on the ground. Ew...LOL, but that's good for you, cuz you made me laugh my head off X'D Wonder what Corey will do? I must know! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ooh, Ryan/Blue's point of view...refreshing change, I like it. Car crash? Whoa, that's pretty sudden, but it does help out the situation that Riley would be in, since she didn't make it into the auditions. Yay, Riley's in the boy band! Haha, a girl in a b-band. That's nice. It's getting late, so I'll just end the review here. Keep updating! |
![]() ![]() ![]() LOL Kardashian? That just made my day. I liked this line a lot: ["But where's the fun in that?" I put on a mock-innocent face, adding in the big brown puppy eyes.] Hehe, it was just funny to me...maybe I'm weird, heh. I just really liked that line. WHAT? Riley didn't make it into the auditions? But I was so sure that he'd win...aw. But that's a nice twist, it's a refreshing dose of un-cliche (I used Riley's word! Yay!) |
![]() ![]() ![]() [(un-cliche is a word . . . in my world)] LOL I laughed so hard at that also that line that was all like ["Somebody kill me now," muttered Ryan. "Gladly," I muttered right back.] or something like that. Dunno if it's right quote. Anywayyy loved it! :P That was for the first chapter. Anyway, second chapter review here :) Aw, why doesn't Maroon Hair/Ryan not like Riley? Personally, Riley's my favorite, besides maybe Cracker (heh, Cracker...love that name). This is so fun to read, I'm half-wanting to read and half-wanting to review :3 |
![]() ![]() ![]() Your AN has me Awwing. Love you too. :D Sudden Lacey perspective? Hmm. I'm not too sure if I like it. It would be weird if this was only a one time thing, right? So you're going to write more with Lacey, or is she still a supporting character? It probably wasn't totally necessary to write it in her perspective if you're planning to keep her a supporting character. Okay, so the pairing is definitely Ryan and Riley? (I almost typed Lynn.) I see a rivalry and a plot problem coming up with the introduction of Lacey's character. Oh god! lol. Actually, I can kinda see this story ending not too long away. We're probably half way through, right? Time flies, especially when you update so quickly. (you're probably groaning at me for still being on chapter 5 on Wasteland. /sobs) On to the meaty part: actually, I don't have much to say about this chapter. I would just say: I do not like Lacey's point of view. I feel like it revealed too much too quickly. (For example, you could've kept us in the dark a bit longer about Lacey's intentions and you could've probably just hinted in Riley's point of view. And perhaps had Riley there for the Ryan part of things? I'm just thinking about how to get rid of this awful woman, lol). I'm really curious as to how you're going to reveal Riley's gender. Like, are you going to make Ryan walk in on her when she's changing or in the shower? x.x I hope this didn't plant any intentions in your mind. LOL Perhaps just her telling him would do. But, if this is going to be a climax scene (which would be awesome) then it has to be dramatic, and of course, THE WALKING IN THING WOULD BE EXCITING. And embarrassing but, w/e. You should go back and name those chapters. Have I said something like this before? I'm looking for things to say, AND THAT CHAPTER 7 IS RIGHT THERE AND... You should do something about that. Well, the end. (I always come short with these conclusions and I wanted to switch it up from that annoying "Keep it up!" or "Good luck!" I am so cheesy.) |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love this. Like...a lot. So you'd better update soon! |