Reviews for Monsters
Horror Lover chapter 1 . 8/23/2012
The real monster is the father.
I loved this! It sent shivers down my spine, and the twist ending really worked! Great job.
Noctiphobia chapter 1 . 8/8/2012
I love the repetition of "Moonlight came weakly through the dirt smeared window." That was very unnerving and creepy. This story was a great example of a childs point of view. I think that you could have been even more vague when it came to the childs perspective and the readers would have still gotten it though. Plus, of course you can never be too descriptive, but this was still a great story nd I enjoyed it. You put together the perfect sized story. Not too long, but not too short. I like it.
walls-have-ears chapter 1 . 8/6/2012
That was a great story, I loved the twist ending too, ad how you described everything in it
Lencionim chapter 1 . 8/6/2012
You have an interesting scenario here, but I think it could use more fleshing out. I like the plot. I like the characters. I like your use of Mommy and Daddy instead of names because it's from a child's perspective.

I just think it could use some more detail and maybe work on the word flow a little bit.