|Reviews for The Drive|
| Pzychotic chapter 1 . 8/9/2012
1st P - good descriptions, I do like the last sentence.
2nd P - the laughing threw off the calm tone but it's okay, I guess it brings in the sunlight.
3rd P - tl;dr. NO I'm kidding! XD haha
4th P - Caisen? Interesting name. 2nd to last sentence made me imagine gingerbread ppl for some reason :P Hmm it's very cliffhanger-y but I guess it's supposed to be that way. A suggestion I would have is in the 2nd paragraph, if you mention something like "as if we were old friends leaving. as if anyone cared." or something like that to illustrate how you aren't very blessed. because from my pov, it's all calm and beautiful, and suddenly you say that you weren't blessed...kinda...D; you know?
All in all this is a really picturesque piece :) I'm eagerly waiting for more stuff from you
| Ophelia Schmit chapter 1 . 8/9/2012
Coming from a place full of cows and farmland (though I'm a city girl, and always will be; I love the city more than country), I wouldn't be able to know what other places look like without watching shows and seeing pictures of it. I would love to see them for myself!
I'm guessing this is real? If I am, have fun on your journey!