Your story was Fantastic best story I hav read so far...love it! :) hope u keep writing!

Wowww... this is the longest story I've evah read. But it was worth the read. And the ending was so sweeet I love Marie she's so awesome .

I guess there's no better story than the truth! :D I loved the end when you just totally showed him who's boss like, "Nuh-uh, I don't give a damn about you." I hope you guys will find your own happiness!

How long ago was all this? Great story by the way the plot is interesting.

Wow, I can imagine you actually looked really good with dark hair. And James is giving me fits. I can't decide whether to love him or hate him. He's sooo confusing!

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...The play? o.O This is about to get very interesting...

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Ohmigod...I literally thought he would kill her! :O

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Personally, I had this feeling that James was a jerk. He's bound to become more...overt...with his abuse. And I think it's hilarious that Nikki wants to be a field commander and plays French horn, because I do to xD

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James was a douche. 'Nough said.

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...Oh...And the plot thickens :P

Good chapter.

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Oohh, honey, I sense some drama coming along...;)

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Oh Lord almighty...xD Nikki reminds me so much of myself it hurts! I, too, play French horn in my school band. But if this is marching band you're talking about, then shouldn't it be a mellophone? Just wondering :P

Also, and your school might do things differently, but aren't field commanders/drum majors supposed to be seniors? Sorry, I just couldn't help but point that out!

Good chapter!

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Awesome! Love it! Jackie is an interesting character;) Definitely intrigued by the story... Oh and F.Y.I., Fictionpress alters the format, i've had my stories messed up, so i'm sure the ragdollwriters are completely adept at using paragraphs and indents.

Interesting start...I really want to see where you'll take this story. Your grammar, description and vocabulary are superb, but the lack of spacing or indentation in the paragraphs really bothers me. If you don't want to put a space in-between paragraphs, then you need to indent (think back to fourth grade when your teacher made you use two fingers). I hope it gets better in later chapters :(

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first off, I am a marching band geek as well, so everything you described, i totally understand! Especially the watching the football game and cheering/yelling and then learning that the people around me don't understand squat about it :P

secondly, Ahhh, that is such a cliffie, but I have to give you props for telling him. There is no way i could do that. But I'm sorry about his answer (unless it continues and has to do with you guys in a passionate embrace ;) haha).