Reviews for Just The Two of Us |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I really love this story. For some reason I just really like it. I like the plot a lot, and even though you said you don't know much about loss you write as if your acquainted with it. Loss is overpowering, it makes you cry for no reason, it makes you feel alone and sad, it makes you wonder, it makes you crazy at times, it makes you feel empty, very empty. The characters captivate this very well without going overboard. Perfect. |
![]() ![]() You write as though Nate is the last man on earth...?...no other men out there?...geez..move on! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm having a love hate relationship with this story. I love that is so tense and emotional, but I hate that I'm always waiting for the next chapter S x |
![]() ![]() ![]() So you decided to break them apart, huh? Sounds like this is just getting very interesting. Can't wait for the next one. |
![]() ![]() , that was fuuny and cute! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Well, another great couple chapters. I like got a little confused from the dad/daughter scene in her room to the all of a sudden a week has gone by. Might want to check that out. I had to read it like three times before I realized what you were trying to say. Lol. Other than that, this is turning out to be a great story. Waiting for the next chapter. Now if only I could finish my own chapter. lol. You write them up so fast it kind of makes me jealous. I'm never completely satisfied with my chapters. So, goo for you for being able to post them so fast! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Heeheehee! LaTHIS WAS ADORABLE! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ne, you need to update. NOW. See, it's very good, we LOVE it. So. . |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh My God. Ne, little brothers are hilarious, huh? |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm still liking it all. I like the lovey dove crap. Seems to me like you've nailed the awkward late teen early twenties stage where you think you know everything, but really don't. At least, when the emotion is real it's something that's easy to describe. Keep it up. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ah. For some reason, this chapter made me think of them as an old married couple...It was really cute! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Yay! I really enjoyed those chapters. So much fun. I liked that she woke up next to him. Very cute. And the mom...I like her too. Keep it up. |
![]() ![]() ![]() That was quite enjoyable! I really liked the emotional chapter. Made her more believable and you can relate to her. Waiting for the next chapter! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hey there! So I'm really liking the story so far. I just have a couple of suggestions for ya, since you asked. I found that grieving was a little lacking, and that the transition to the kiss was almost to sudden. What was she feeling emotionally? But other than that so far so good. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Well, to be honest, even if you don't know anything about loss, you nailed it on the head. I have a little tear in my eye right now reading that last sentence. This is a very touching story so far. I can only imagine how you're going to continue on. It's also well written and stays in the first person consistently. Me personally, I have a hard time writing first person, so good for you. Waiting for the next chapter. |