Reviews for The Devil's Bride
Samantha chapter 10 . 11/1/2012
Im not sure this is quite good enough to try to get published. Work on your show dont tell and sentence fluency. Also what time period is this in. If this is in a fantastical world your language is a bit too modern. I suggest getting a beta. Good idea though.
bookppl93 chapter 10 . 10/25/2012
Awesome! :D love this story.
midnightblue203 chapter 10 . 10/25/2012
Love the story! Keep up the good work.
bookppl93 chapter 9 . 10/18/2012
AWWW :(
bookppl93 chapter 8 . 10/4/2012
Haha good chapter!
bookppl93 chapter 7 . 9/17/2012
Cute .
bookppl93 chapter 6 . 9/4/2012
Gahh I don't get reminders of this story for some reason buy I am glad I checked on it. :)
Aqua Mareien chapter 6 . 8/30/2012
...bum bum buuuuuuuukmmmmmm! ahhhh what happens next? will kaylus come and steal the young girl away? will the mother visiously murder her daughter for not wearing a dress tommarow? or will harold, the so-called 'over grown belt' (hehehe loved that part :D), come and eat the whole family, including the devil? O.o i hope to find out soon... O,O i have to know! *O* please? :D lolz (hugz!) :D
Aqua Mareien chapter 5 . 8/29/2012
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA HHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! I'm loving it more by the word! :D HAAHAHAHAHAAHHAHAAHAHHAAHHAH AHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHHAHA! amazing writting, my dear freind! :D
Aqua Mareien chapter 4 . 8/29/2012
:D poor lilana...but then again, i kind of wish i could take her place...;D lolz
Aqua Mareien chapter 3 . 8/29/2012
you did a wonderful job with the violence! :D i felt like i really did have a guy's chopped off arm attatched to mine! :D hahaha
Aqua Mareien chapter 1 . 8/29/2012
ah ha! amazing! :D
bookppl93 chapter 5 . 8/17/2012
In the nightgown or did I miss something?
bookppl93 chapter 4 . 8/15/2012
Hi! New comer . super excited about this story please continue.
midnightblue203 chapter 4 . 8/15/2012
Interesting story. I can't wait to see what happens between the two. Liliana is a little fiesty girl, I love her!
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