Reviews for The Girl at the Bus Stop
U MadeMyLifeComplete chapter 1 . 1/3/2013
This is such an amazing story! I loved reading it because it was so captivating
demonicDRAMAqueen chapter 1 . 1/2/2013
wow...WOW...loved it. Just wow.
Laurieleigh92 chapter 1 . 11/10/2012
I love the voice in this story. It's extremely casual and helps you feel for the narrator. Such a sweet moment at the end - not impressed the brunette sister is a tramp, mind...
Peachy-09 chapter 1 . 8/16/2012
This is an exceptional piece of work, FD. I really love it and I do hope you think about writing one shots more often.

"I guessed they were sisters. Her sister was a gorgeous girl." I'd have probably spaced these two, to make them different paragraphs? It's completely up to you though!

I hope you write more soon!
Guest chapter 1 . 8/16/2012
This is a completely different kind of read, and you pulled it off. I vote that maybe you do write more one shots!
Guest chapter 1 . 8/15/2012
Cute story.
Michelle here chapter 1 . 8/15/2012
I caught this on my hotmail and didn't sign in.

This is an absolute jem! I love the use of voice and narrative it's extremely effective and kept me reading on.

Hum, that girl, she sounded really familiar ;) Description was lovely and everything hit the spot. It's going to be favourited when I sign in! xxx
AlternativeRocker chapter 1 . 8/15/2012
Is the main character by any chance based on a certain ginger girl I know? :P
Really liked this little one shot, and am pretty sure you're just posting all this to get back at me for not posting!
Love it lots!
Guest chapter 1 . 8/15/2012
This was an extremely well written one-shot, especially if it's a layout and style you're not used to writing. I believe that maybe one-shots are your thing, you've just never had the credit you deserve for your writing! I do hope you write more soon.
Mr. Ree chapter 1 . 8/14/2012
I would have never guessed that you didn't write oneshots or in first person, because you pulled this story off beautifully! I loved how most of this was monologue and how well you used it to describe everything and how he's telling this to his daughter.

Ali
prankster105 chapter 1 . 8/14/2012
i love this oneshot. it's funny but at the same time heart warming and you mix in the romance too. i could see ou becoming a best selling author with the great structure that you have in your writing.
Guest chapter 1 . 8/14/2012
Best one shot I've ever read! :)