this is such an amazing story! Please keep up the hard work! XD

This was an okay chapter. There were cute parts here and there. I think it might be better if you wrote, "Grinning, he released her and gave her a gentle shove..."

I don't have much to say about this chapter, but that I don't if it should be "Cole observed the two from where he was on line buying a pretzel" or that Cole was in line.

Kayla actually seems like a decent girl. Trevor is confusing me, though, because I don't quite understand why he slightly opened up to Nicole.

It might just be me, but I didn't feel the awkwardness, save for the times when it was pointed out. But otherwise, it was written really well.

Cole's character is written very well. He's determined enough to wait for Nicole, but he's flawed enough to still seem like he could actually exist in real life.

Cole's and Nicole's relationship seems more like a friendship to me, though they were technically on a date. Plus, I still don't like Cas and Trevor together.

I don't like the new development between Casandra and Trevor. It doesn't sound like it'll turn out very well.

I find Cole very forgiving... and very determined. Gotta give him credit; most guys would blow off a girl who ditched them for another. I pity Nicole, losing her phone and all.

I don't necessarily agree with the way Nicole left Cole to find Brody, but awkward situations make for awkward escapes. By the way, the second-to-last line had a couple of mistakes. I think you meant line of vision and the fourth wall.

I can sort of relate to Nicole, what with one of my closest friends pairing me up with almost any guy I happen to talk to. I also like the fact that Brody isn't resentful towards Abby for keeping him from an average teenage life.

I like the way that Nicole and Brody have the yes-no question conversations. Though, I have to say, I've played basketball in middle school, and even though we were definitely not the best team out there, we did tend to score more than just 9 or 10 points. But maybe we played differently; I don't know.

You sure know how to pick your endings. There was a spelling error, but it's not a big deal.

I'm not a huge fan of Casandra and Trevor, but I do like the humor in the beginning of the chapter.

I really like the plot for this story. You typed the word "see" twice in the beginning, by the way.