This is awesome, really well written, and Mildred is really easy to relate to in some ways! Nice story :)

Aww poor Mildred, wasn't expecting this to happen :(

Aww, Mildred is awesome, Leah to, but I just really like the character development of Mildred, and her thoughts etc. Good Chapter and Story too of course!

Enjoying this story :) Keep having to remember you mean American football with football;) Its interesting reading a non - fanfiction story of yours!

I really got into this story and I'm sad to see it's finished BUT I know there's at least another two sequels (kinda how I knew stuff was gonna happen but still) and I shall read them now!
It was really enjoyable although at times I think the conversations were a bit ping pong and wasn't sure who was saying what but other than that I can't really think of anything else. Good job!

In response to when people figured out they were gay, since high school, when I was about 14-16 I kinda knew I was gay and to make things that much harder on me I went to an all-girl school and honestly I swear to god when I was a junior it seemed the worse thing you could be at the school was a lesbian, it was wrong and disgusting and so on so naturally I never acknowledged myself as being gay I was just like lol whatever, I think I freaked out and really denied it so hard, and by that I mean I denied it in my head. Honestly, it was only recently after I turned 19 that I said it out loud, that I accepted it and came out to some of my friends. I was nervous as hell but felt somewhat satisfied that I was finally accepting it, I mean I'd known for a while but there hadn't been any reason to tell anyone (I felt somewhat asexual so I wasn't so sure but i know 100% that I like girls) anyway, I met someone so naturally I thought I'd tell my friends and with my family I see no point in telling them until I actually get a girlfriend which might be some time because I'm not a relationship type of person (unfortunately I kinda threw that girl away, I mean we still talk but as soon as she made clear she was "inlove" with me it was over) so I'm not sure if any of that is helpful at all but there you go!

I'm quite enjoying the story so far, it's an interesting perspective because at times I feel I can definitely relate and then at others I find it interesting since personally I've never had anxiety to that level or panic attacks so it's kinda shining a new light in my world and I don't know, it's just interesting, I guess. Good work!

nice...

I really like this story because it some what relates to what I went through when I came out and everything... just I was younger than Mildred was but only by a couple of years.

Wow, Leah's not hiding much is she? She may as well have made a move by now xD. Reminding Mildred that she's bi, commenting that she's smiling with each text. She's not taking any chances here, is she? I'm glad Mildred's still confused about her motives. I also liked her awkwardness with texting, it's a feeling I share if I don't know the person. I quite like this story. It's pretty good :D

I liked this introduction to Mildred. She seems like a character I can sympathise with, so I look forward to reading more. In fact, I'll do just that in a minute. I like the idea of her being super confused when Leah comes up to talk to her, that's a natural reaction. Most people who write these stories just accept it and go along with it, which you wouldn't do, ESPECIALLY IS THEY WERE THE SAME SEX AS YOU. I'm assuming Leah is Mildred's romantic interest. I'm also assuming Mildred doesn't know she's gay. So yeah, that's why this is a good reaction, rather than you immediately force feeding us the romance. Awesome. I like it.

Yay! Happy ending! I like the story. A lot. The character progression of Mildred is awesome, and Natasha the barista seems like a good person. :D The only thing is. Leah was my fave. But now. D: You ruined it for meee. D: So mixed feelings lol. It's just heartbreaking to find out Leah's unfeeling. Write more though!

Shit, I just realized I'm doing my old habit of shaking my hands when I got excited. So many people made fun of me for it lolol I haven't done this since elementary school. Sometimes I do when I'm SUPAH EXCITED.

YOU MADE ME SUPAH EXCITED

This sounds like the logic unit we had to do in Geometry because we're all dumbfucks that don't know how to use logic.

[The darker shape she recognized as Ethan.] It's funny 'cause he's black and whoever is reading this because Wings is amazing and totally underrated you should know the insider information that

ETHAN

IS

BLACK

AND

YOU'LL

NEVER

KNOW.

... Just saying.

["Well, he was cooking naked."

Val was covering his ears again, so Mildred spoke instead. "I wouldn't mind a naked cook. Sounds fun."] I bet he only cooks on Tuesdays, right?

["Actually, his first wet dream was about you."] /laughs loudly and unattractively.

Sorry, I was too absorbed to give my commentation on that beautiful shit but:

OH MY GOD I AM SO PROUD OF YOU, BABY GIRL! You did so good and you finished it so well and you went about it right and you finished your first piece! :D If I were with you I would order ice cream and have that Devon moment just for fun. Also: YOU DIDN'T HINT THAT HE WAS BLACK EVEN THOUGH YOU SAID YOU WOULD

GUYS! ATTENTION EVERYONE! ETHAN IS BLACK AND WINGS IS AVOIDING IT SO I'M JUST GOING TO TELL YOU THAT ETHAN IS BLACK, MILDRED IS HISPANIC, AND VAL IS ASIAN. I KNOW THIS FOR SURE.

I'm so proud! :D

Oh boy, dat warning. I proceed with caution, sensei.

Oh nuuu, Millie Moo don't invite over the succubus! Oh my.

[This didn't particularly bother her; they had only been dating a couple weeks. It would be silly for them to be in love already.] /bangs head against wall repeatedly. Your. Views. On. Dating. Fucking. Suck. Wings.

WHY WOULD YOU SMACK THE GIRLFRIEND LABEL ON WHEN
YOU
DON'T
FUCKING
KNOW
EACH
OTHER

Oh my secksi scene. /reads next paragraph. Well that was disappointing.

[What a second.] You made a boo boo.

Oh my god, yay! You included my nickname for Millie in your story! I DESERVE RECOGNITION WHEN YOU BECOME FAMOUS :D

OH MY GOD YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY NOW TO FINISH IT! :D

You did not go into detail about that oral sex thing. I find this a mistake because then you could advertise that you have a fucking lemon in your story and then all dah fangirls and fanboys will come to the yard and say it's better than FF.

YOUR BUTTERFLIES BRING THE FANGIRLS TO THE YARD
AND THEY'RE LIKE
IT'S BETTER THAN FF
DAMN RIGHT
IT'S BETTER THAN FF
I COULD TEACH YOU BUT I'M NOT A FUCKING ENGLISH TEACHER

That's your new theme song. Badass.

[She didn't really seem like the apologizing type. Sure, Mildred didn't know her all that well,] I THINK THAT'S MOTHERFUCKING HORRIBLE THAT YOU DON'T KNOW YOUR OWN GIRLFRIEND THAT WELL. WHAT THE FUCK, MILLIE MOO. BE MORE CAREFUL ABOUT THE LABEL YOU GIVE THINGS.

ETHAN IS BLACK
ETHAN IS BLACK
ETHAN IS BLAC ... Just saying.

Leah is a ho. I never liked that bitch ass ho skank motherfucker. Just saying x2

Was this half-rape? I have the feeling that Millie Moo was just raped. And she was under narcotics and couldn't say no because Leah dropped drugs in her drink that she was drinking but you didn't say she was drinking it because you didn't find it important enough.

IT BURRRRRRRRRNS. THEY TYPE LIKE ILLITERATES. THEY TYPE WORSE THAN ME WHEN I DO MY COMEDIC ILLITERATE GAGS. Jesus motherfucking christ god lord satan. God.

You should make their chat things different so it's easier to read. Like, make Mildred be italicized or Saph. Whoever.

Oh, shit, I was reading the next chapter and forgot about this. YAY LIFE DAMAGING ORAL SEX... ._.