|Reviews for Soul Candy!|
| xxxyx chapter 6 . 10/25/2013
Aw... no author notes at the beginning? :P Did you finally decide to act mature? *shot*
Despite the messy formatting, POV shifts, rowdy interaction and prose, got to admit that the story flows. It flows and it's lively. I'm enjoying it, and when I found out there are no more chapters, I was like... aww...
Good luck with everything!
| xxxyx chapter 5 . 10/25/2013
'Are the strong and the cowardly' - rofl.
'I've heard worse.' - lol
Asobu playground... As in... ASOBU? Crossover! XD
(You wa gosuto!) I'm a ghost? (YOU WA SHOCK!) My entire life is a lie! *shot*
Pff... Aladdin reference, of all things? XD
| xxxyx chapter 4 . 10/25/2013
You know what? With your story, the author notes are where half the enjoyment is in. Much like how bread has most of the nutrients in the crust. Lol.
You live with Soul Eater and One Piece characters. That explains a lot.
Anyway, love the nonsensical three-liners at the beginning of every chapter.
9 line breaks.
As rowdy as always, lol.
Ah... I see, the first line of your story summary pretty much explained this chapter lol.
| xxxyx chapter 3 . 10/25/2013
Pf... Kid... 90% of readers... I'm going to kill you for that...
Anyway, I just found it weird for a girl to be named Fly, but... meh. Basking in Razzy-ism!
HOLY. I counted 33 page breaks in this chapter. Must be a record of some kind. The effect was intriguing though, the life-flashing-before-my-eyes kind of effect. Although, if you go by my way of formatting, I won't use the line breaks, because the italics and the normal fonts would sort themselves. But hey, who cares? It's Razzy-ism! XD
| xxxyx chapter 2 . 9/17/2013
Lol you have the weirdest names.
'"We're not going AFTER them, we're going to FOLLOW them. There's a big difference, you see?"' - that's Razzy-ism for you. XD
"No offence," Sticky licked his lips. "But your cat tasted really horrible." - XD
'"...I thought I heard somebody trying to call for help but had their mouth taped up."' - oh you.
'It was a half-Sticky half-Doctor Octopus from Spiderman.' - uh huh. Your wacky lines are so fun to make fun of. *shot* 'Cue the evil laughing!' - See? XD *shot* Stop making me got shot at in a review box!
Yeah, I got confused sometimes on who spoke what, and sometimes, the what-is-going-on. But you've improved since, of course. XD
| xxxyx chapter 1 . 9/17/2013
But... it ended up a six-shot. *was shot* WHAT?
Lol monobrow. Naruto. Pff... you sure you won't get sued? :P
Standing on second hand... Well hello there, fellow author with crazy imagery! XD
| Katsurou Shimizu chapter 5 . 10/17/2012
Your prose flows a lot better now. Keep up the good work mate :) And the candy cane routine? Priceless.
Liking the interaction between Natsume and Saru already.
| Jax Creation chapter 2 . 10/17/2012
Haha, this is funny, easy to read :3
However, I would change Natsume's POV to first-person in the prologue if you're going to use first-person in this chapter.
Looking forward to reading more :D
| Vector Phantom chapter 4 . 10/16/2012
Sorry, got busy and didn't have much time to read
Looks like they all have a lot going on and a lot of stuff to worry about right now
| Katsurou Shimizu chapter 4 . 10/8/2012
(Looks at comment about story resembling soul eater a bit. Looks at title. Facepalm.)
Same criticisms apply for this chapter, though you sorta made it worst with two 1st POV and 3rd. Otherwise...
| Katsurou Shimizu chapter 3 . 10/8/2012
A side comment: Love your chapter names :D
I'm starting to get use to the switching of perspectives, though its still a bit unnerving. The humor is once more top-notch in this chapter. And the suspense and drama works surprisingly well here (you give yourself too little credit), though the manner in which it was inserted gave me another psychedelic... what's that, another verb you say, ok... hallucinatory... ok sounds a little wrong... ok never mind.
Its a pity that the story has been on hiatus for quite some time, because there are seeds of great conflict and humor here. Get back to it soon ok?
Meanwhile, I shall just enjoy another chapter. :)
| Katsurou Shimizu chapter 2 . 10/8/2012
I really like the voice that you are using so far, which suits this wacky crazy premise so well. The setting also kinda reminds me a bit about Soul Eater. That exchange about licorice had me chuckling quite a bit XD
That said I have a little problem with the frequent jumping of perspectives within the fragments of the chapter itself, and I don't quite get the change from 3rd to 1st (for Natsume) and 1st to 3rd(for Saru) from the prologue to the first chapter. Makes the reading experience a little too psychedelic for my liking :P
That said, I'm intrigued. Onwards with the next chapter!
| Vector Phantom chapter 3 . 9/7/2012
I'd have big trouble making 8 word sentences. It's pretty cool that you can manage it. This makes me want to read Soul Eater. I tried to once but I got distracted. Anyway, the chapter itself was pretty cool too. I'm curious to find out more about everyone. Well, I better get going right about now. I will be sure to read more soon!
| Vector Phantom chapter 2 . 9/7/2012
Oh cool, looks like there's going to be a fight next time
I'm kind of interested in this shop though.
| Vector Phantom chapter 1 . 9/6/2012
Oh this looks really cool, I love the main character's voice, you write first person very well.
The story is really funny and I like the nicknames