|Reviews for The Birthday Incident|
| Samsonet chapter 4 . 8/23/2012
The trick is brilliant, and Adrian is so cool! But you don't have to put the characters' backgrounds in such a short story, considering that the murder investigation is the plot. This story would be a lot better without those references.
And while I understand the chatspeak, it's very annoying, particularly if you have no idea what they're saying. Maybe you could have Peter translate it rather than writing the texts word-for-word.
| love971 chapter 4 . 8/23/2012
I absolutely adore how creative you are in the crimes! Who would have guessed, knife in the cake? Haha keep it up