Reviews for Down to Earth
Duck chapter 1 . 10/23/2012
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Dill Wilson chapter 1 . 8/26/2012
This is a great first attempt - nice story, likable characters, easy read.

I would suggest breaking some of the paragraphs up a bit more - there are a few places when it's confusing as to who's speaking and/or who's thought it is because the sentences run on. If you put a few "returns" in there (i.e. start a new paragraph) it might make it easier on the reader.

Here's an example:

"Sophiee!" wailed Amelia. Elliot sighed. He was at his limit. "AMELIA," He screamed. She watched him silently and accusingly, and started to cry. Elliot had no choice but to pull over and comfort her. But all she would say was Sophie's name. Well, he could only make out Sophie's name, the rest of it was jumble with her tears and sniffs. Finally, the young Hollis couldn't take it anymore. She opened the door and ran.

Could be:

"Sophiee!" wailed Amelia.
Elliot sighed. He was at his limit. "AMELIA," He screamed.
She watched him silently and accusingly, and started to cry.
Elliot had no choice but to pull over and comfort her. But all she would say was Sophie's name. Well, he could only make out Sophie's name, the rest of it was jumble with her tears and sniffs. Finally, the young Hollis couldn't take it anymore. She opened the door and ran.

Keep writing!
FromMeToYouOnYourBirthday chapter 1 . 8/26/2012
SO CUTE:3 i loved it!