|Reviews for Lie to me|
| Gelatin is dead whale bones chapter 1 . 8/29/2012
The second stanza was the best. Overall it's a great narrative. Personally, the repetition of It's a game he said would have been more powerful if it was just repeated beginning and end. But it's all about personal style. c: Keep writing.
"She got lost in lies and kisses" I feel like great moments like these are sort of spoiled with the repetitive last line. It lacks a sense of originality.. but again it's your poem. Great work.
| MagicWords chapter 1 . 8/29/2012
Wow that was some powerful stuff. I take it he drowned her? Wow very scary but beautifully written!