Interesting! More, please! :D :D:D

Ho! This is Rama, the main manager and author from the Young Author Group account. Your single chapter is AWESOME, and I look forward to more!
Would you like to check out my story? It's: The Six Dimensions book 1 Pixellated

Wow this was great! I love Peter Pan and any modern retellings!

It could have used a tad bit more info, and I was not a fan of the font in the center. It made it tricky to read.

Great beginning. Keep it up!