|Reviews for The Moon And All Her Spiders|
| Anihyr Moonstar chapter 1 . 9/15/2012
I like the surreal imagery associated with this. It gives it a neat, but chilling feel as one reads along.
I don't like it when you break up your flow, though, in the third stanza. For the first two stanzas, every line had exactly four syllables, and that stays true for the first two lines of the third stanza, but then the pattern breaks unexpectedly and it feels strange. The last stanza is even more broken up (4, 4, 6, 5) syllable wise. (Unless you were *going* for increasing dissonance by the end...) In my opinion, it makes it read a lot less smoothly, but you can take the advice or leave it, obviously. Not a bad poem. :)
- Moonstar, Courtesy of the Review Game's Review Marathon - link in my profile
| MaNgApAsSiOnFrUiT chapter 1 . 9/5/2012
Really well done poem!
| M K Wolfe chapter 1 . 9/4/2012
Gorgeous! Has a very awesome tribal feel.