Reviews for Starlight Love |
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![]() ![]() ![]() awww, it's over. you know usually i don't like stories where characters say they love each other after like not even a week, but i can't complain about that in your story. maybe it's the pacing, maybe it's the way you write, but it actually felt believable that they fell in love so quick. anyways, i'd love to see a continuation of their story...or even just one more chapter to see what happened afterwards. great job. |
![]() ![]() ![]() another small typo with major difference in meaning. should be dessert with two Ss...not sure they want to be served a dry piece of land at the end of their supper. |
![]() ![]() ![]() lol. so cute! I love Thomas already. |
![]() ![]() ![]() small typo but major difference in meaning...when Albert talks about his book, that should be heroine with an e, otherwise you're talking about the drug. other than that, i enjoy the way you write. although you haven't described the characters much i feel like i can still develop a picture of how they are in my mind. |
![]() ![]() ![]() hello there! i can imagine Albert as this kind of cavalier guy who's decided he's just going to date women and drink wine until he dies, lol. one thing, you have 5 paragraphs that are basically one-after-the-other that all start with Albert. it might be better to switch it up some more. |
![]() ![]() This is hilarious...hello next chapter! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Love your characters. Keep writing. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I thought this story was captivating and an easy read. 'A feel good romance.' Great work. |