Reviews for The Hole
Archia chapter 1 . 9/22/2012
I love the idea behind this, of there being a hole, I think it's great. I don't think it needs to be broken into stanzas at all. It's all covering the one thing basically, and I think it works as this; stanzas would be unnecessary. That's how I see it at least. So, I loved the poem, and the hole worked as a great metaphor.
Faithless Juliet chapter 1 . 9/18/2012
I really like your voice in this. I wouldn't call it cocky but there's a very strong subtle cocky vibe to it. Almost like the narrator is goading the subject into figuring out who they are, and I like that because it's a nice change from how most people would write this, which made it very unique, and *fun* to read.

I do think the poem would work better with separate stanzas. I think it would help bring more emphases to the ideas that you're expressing, rather than having them all in one section. I think they would be just as strong, if not stronger if they were stand alone. Keep up the good work.

Much love,
Sami Dial chapter 1 . 9/8/2012
i wanna be the first.