Reviews for Taking Risks
whatthegreencarrot chapter 1 . 5/7/2013
I got referred here by a friend, RubyRed22, so credits to her for showing me up here. :) I'm glad, too.

[Luckily, I didn't think Nick ever noticed. It astounds me how clueless some people are.] You might not want to change tenses so frequently. You went from past to present pretty fast, and I'm also thinking that a "had" after Nick might make the flow go a bit better.

[She has dark hair, and she was a tiny little asian girl.] Again with the tenses. You went from "has" to "was" while describing a character, all in one sentence. "Asian" should be capitalized, too.

You don't really have to work on your tenses, because it's something I just nag at people about. It's always better to have a solid tense, I think, but some situations call for a change. The sentence displayed up above was one of those occasions when you stick to one tense, though, so... Yeah. Sorry if I'm coming off as a grammar Nazi right now, because I AM enjoying the story. I'm just pointing out mistakes first; the real review will be at the bottom.

I found a few other tense things that bugged me—not all changes tick me off, and I found one that didn't in this chapter, but there were another two or so after the last one that I pointed out. You could look this chapter over, maybe? Don't want to sound bossy or anything, because it's your story, but it's a friendly suggestion.

I have a habit of sometimes adding in unnecessary commas, which I'm trying to get rid of, but I have some sort of spidey-sense for missing commas. I didn't find any actual mistakes, although I usually put a comma before I write "though," but it sort of seems like you're cutting it a bit close. I dunno, it's just this odd feeling that strikes me, even though I didn't actually see missing commas. Besides the ones before "though," I mean. It's... Well, I'm not sure if that comma is necessary, though, so I'll just leave it at that.

Sorry, I'm a real sucker for grammar and punctuation. It was a good first chapter, even though there was that part when you wrote that Alexis and Nick would be partners. I mean, it does seem very cliche, and it might be a bit overplayed *winces* sorry. I know this is your first story, since I read the AN, but the criticism just flows out. It's not something I mean to do, so I apologize if I seem a little testy. I like your story. Seriously.
renegade01 chapter 10 . 5/2/2013
awesome story. i love it. you do tension like a pro ;)
AMessofPickles chapter 10 . 4/17/2013
Ahahaha cannot wait to see how she's gonna go to bed and everything ;) That should be interesting. I've also loved seeing you grow as a writer because of this story. Everything from the lenghth of your chapters (DANG THIS ONE WAS LONG AND I LOVED IT) to your actual writing and characterization is wonderful. I really enjoyed how you developed the relationship between Nick and Alexis :) It's really well done :D

Can't wait for another chapter!
i.luv.ur.story chapter 10 . 4/12/2013
Update please. This story is really good and you are a very talented writer
Hedgehog Named Fish chapter 1 . 4/12/2013
i'm not gonna go on talking about what i like in each character, how the story is this, and how teh story is that, and all that jazz; but i do really like ur story!
update soon or santa will put u on his notty list!
misskenzi98 chapter 9 . 4/6/2013
Ok... your authors note ( at the bottom of chapter nine) literally brought me to tears! Not like sad tears, they're from me trying not to laugh extremely loud since I'm reading this story at 1:41 in the morning and my family would be pissed at me if I woke them up. So, anyways I'm totally loving the story so far. Haha I'm a writer myself (not as good as you) and my family has no idea I write either so I know exactly how it feels to almost get caught writing something that would be really awkward to explain. I love the story! Its one of my top faves! Keep up the good work! :)
w3ardo chapter 10 . 4/6/2013
since when were they together?
beverlyamethyst16 chapter 10 . 4/5/2013
I missed this SO much! I love this story :D It is so amazing! This chapter was fantastic! Which maybe partly due to the fact I missed the story so much... but mostly because you are an amazing writer! :)
Please update soon! I hope to see some more of the romance between Lex and Nick! :D
blackmoon21 chapter 10 . 4/5/2013
they are just so darn cute together...
Starstreaker chapter 10 . 4/5/2013
The big L word...

I am so excited for your next update!

Keep on writing my dear.
Sparklingjewel12 chapter 10 . 4/4/2013
Oh my god that was amazinG! I'm so glad you finally updated and that the chapter was so long! It was great!
addicted.series.fiction chapter 10 . 4/4/2013
Ok so first of all YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY! U UPDATED! Second of all tht ws an amazingly long chapter and trust me I ws sooo glad tht it ws this long and tht ending ws like YES! FINALLY they feel the same about each other! I ws edging for him to kiss her and end the whole competitionb but I guess it's too early for tht to happen! So I'm kind of glad I kept urging u to update cuz tht ws a really gd chapter! :D waiting 4 the next 1 nw ;)
heal me forever chapter 10 . 4/4/2013
thank god u updated finally!
big thanks for d big update

i love dis chapter pretty awesum :DDD

update soon (:
RubyRed22 chapter 10 . 4/3/2013
Ohmygosh! This chapter was so long, but it was soo good. I kind of miss the other characters since we haven't seen them in a while, but the "Nicholexis" action certainly made up for it! ;) I'm actually really surprised with the pace at which this story is moving, which makes me wonder what else you have in store for us...I hope it something dramatic! It's so easy to tell how much in love they are; they make it obvious even to each other. Why is it taking them so long?!

I seriously love your characters. It's not much of mystery how they could have fallen for the other so easily. Nick is so sweet and he's like, the perfect guy. Nothing in him reflects his reputation! And I love how confident and easy-going Lex is. It may make for a good story, but I personally really dislike those shy and awkward types that always give people a reason to look down on them... Not that I don't know some good stories with a character like that.

I have to say again, though - this is crazy long! It's like, double of what you usually do, so that at least adds to why you took so long. Funny story actually, out of the month (or four) that you haven't come out with a new chapter, it was literally just yesterday that I found myself missing this story and re-reading the previous chapter! Isn't that weird? O.o I must be psychic because that did a really good job creeping me out. And this story made such an impression on me that couldn't forget it if I tried! I honestly thought that it was a little over a month since your last update until I checked. That's how well I remembered your story!

*phew* k, I'm done now.
Ginbrat chapter 10 . 4/3/2013
So, um, does that mean he lost? Does that mean that he's in love with her? Please, say yes. I love this story and I desperately want them to be together for real.
Please update soon.
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