|Reviews for The Call Of The Galaxy|
| Lord Byron Sandowski chapter 1 . 3/28/2013
Obviously, old Byron doesn't know how to write a story. And, it isn't even finished. Hey, you talentless hack! Write longer stories!
| ttsmith chapter 1 . 9/10/2012
You should make some space between time and location, and the rest of the texts.
Also, a good thing would be to describe a location with a sentence or even two.
You should arrange dialogues better. Place each character's text in separate lines, so we can understand ( see) better the whole conversation.
You have 3 scenes in the 1st chapter, and a few characters. Maybe you should describe your center character better and give the rest of the bunch a few touches of a personality.
I hope you will continue.