|Reviews for What We Have Given|
| Ophelia Schmit chapter 1 . 9/30/2012
Short but sweet is what I say often. It's nice.
| The Autumn Queen chapter 1 . 9/14/2012
I like the use of the word "creeping" in your first line because it gives a connotation of something being hidden, a deeper meaning that isn't so apparent from a single read, and because yo haven't expanded on it, it can relate to the entire world. :) I'm inclined to think it refers to betrayal hiding in the night, but that's just me.
I don't like your use of dashes because they appear to, for me, over-dramatise the pauses between lines. They feel like you're forcing something upon me as a reader, but that's about all. I also liked your last line; nice sentiment.
Ohana from the Review Marathon (link in profile)
| Delilah Brightman chapter 1 . 9/13/2012
But extremely powerful.