Reviews for Child of Steel
Oci Oceana chapter 11 . 10/27/2013
Finally! another chapter!
Oci Oceana chapter 10 . 7/25/2013
Tiger's so cute!
Oci Oceana chapter 9 . 4/1/2013
please write another chapter soon!
Oci Oceana chapter 6 . 1/31/2013
ok... no offense but your story needs alots of work. It is getting better as it goes but, I'm still not exactly sure what the 'darkness' looks like, and your characters have little personality. Also how can Talia remember a picture of Gabby taken when she was around 8 and know it was Gabby when she was 13? People change alots in 5 years. Also, the first chapter goes a little to fast. When you wake up from a coma people aren't going to immedantly ask you 'would you like to join are academy?' They would ask about your background and if your ok and tell you more about them and the academy and stuff like that. Also, the class before the graduation was a little rushed. They learned like the day before their graduation what the darkness actually is? Wouldn't that be the first thing they learned? And all they were told in the class was just like one paragraph of the academy's history and about the founder? Also how do you use fire to cut through darkness? You might want to re-write your first couple of paragraphs and maybe add an extra one with more detail. The story plot does have potential and the paragraph lengths are good. Keep on writing, its getting better. And I really don't mean to offend.
Oci
IcebergKold chapter 4 . 10/21/2012
I Love This Story!
CharissaKarn chapter 4 . 10/21/2012
:) you are welcome! :) and have funn with NaNoWriMo! :D looking forward to reading more after November! :D
ReaderWriter1616 chapter 3 . 10/14/2012
Oh my gosh this is amazing! UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE! NOW NOW NOW NOW!
CharissaKarn chapter 3 . 10/13/2012
AHHHH! This is so EXCITING! :) Looking forward to reading more! :D also i liked how she included them in the decision, that strengthens their faith and trust in each other! :) LOVE this story! :D
CharissaKarn chapter 2 . 9/19/2012
:) please update again, soon! :D i'm really enjoying this!
CharissaKarn chapter 1 . 9/19/2012
:) this will be interesting! :D