Reviews for The Men in Slacks
PoolMunky chapter 1 . 9/17/2012
Hello! Reviewing as I go.

I like how you opened it, having this organization tell the story from first person. I like first person view points because they tend to give a greater insight into a character's mind than third person.

Uh-oh! You have written, "At this point, Canada realized that the U.S. had both the C.I.A., the F.B.I., and the M.I.B." Normally, that's not a problem, but C.I.A., F.B.I, and M.I.B. are three things and you say "both." I would suggest either changing it to say something along the lines of, "Canada realized that the U.S. had both the C.I.A. and the F.B.I. And let's not forget the M.I.B." or leave "both" out entirely.

The word "stereotype" after "everything in Canada is beavers!" doesn't need to be capitalized since it's not the beginning of a new sentence.


Hehe, it was a fun read with a promising outlook. I enjoyed the subtle humor and look forward to seeing where you take it.