Hi,

Interesting, interesting, are we seeing some fore-shadowing of a new twist in the relationship? Is there more to Markar and his duty than Rae knows? Humm...

John

YAY!Finally, it feels like ages!I love this story, specially Markar because of his innocence. Please update soon. I kept reading the last chapter over and over because its my favorite.

Hot hot, chili pepper. Major in the A degree HOTT! update ASAP!
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Loved it. Please update soon!

Yay. :D So excited.
So the critic in me is telling to state that your sex scenes aren't terrible, a bit fast, but not bad.
Try experimenting with determine terms though, even if you don't post anything, even if the characters don't below to a story. The only way to get comfortable is to write them a great deal. Personally, I find it helps to write about things you personally are uncomfortable with writing; it makes you better as a writer over all. :)
Other wise, good job.

Thanks for writing. :)

I must admit to something I am only slightly embarrassed to admit. You story has been up on my 'tabs' for well over a week now. Not that I haven't gotten to reading this chapter, quite the opposite.
Your story has been in my 'tabs' for so long because I'm so in love with it, I'm so anxious for an update, so I just re-read the entire thing. There I said it. When I should be grading papers, or doing any of the other million things I have lined up for 'doing', I find myself sitting and reading. It's that fabulous.
So, for the sake of my sanity, and all the other stuff I have to complete, UPDATE.
But other wise -

Thank you for writing. :)

Hey,

Ahhh... the joy of first love... ;)

Actually, very well written. An image of the emotion, the commitment as we would all hope it would be.

Interesting descriptions of the 'tree-house', obviously total destruction of a community of sentient beings ... by, but more importantly, why?

Seems a lot of potential story for just a couple more chapters...

John

AH i cant believe that it is nearly done - like you stated at the end of the chapter. I really loved this update. Please keep up the great writing and Happy New Year!

I love your story keep going. Please update soon! I Check everyday for updates!

Loved this story Markar is so innocent I love him. Please update soon I really enjoyed reading this story.

Morrreeee. This is amazing. It's amazingly written and the characters are amazing. Gah! I can't wait for the next chapter. :)

Hey,

Very good ... interesting 'thoughts/reasons' on Rae's part at the start of all of this...

Just a few thoughts:

'Keeping one hand around her waist' either he has very large hands or she has a tiny waist ... maybe arm might be better?

Not sure why/how she fell? Then not get hurt? Must be quite the plush camping mattress. How did she fall so far away that he needed to 'He stalked towards her just as leisurely' (I know, picky picky)

The best was her taking over ... it was prefect for the story line ... good consistence of characterization and plot. (pretty hot too!) ;)

You did very well with the descriptions. Especially, if you really didn't do much reviewing!

John

amazing chapter :D glad she didn't die! keep up the great writing

For your first time writing a lemon, it was good. :D About time those 2 did the deed. lol!

Your summary is so catchy! It's like you gluyed me to your story. And your writing is good as well.