Hey,

Good relationship advancement. A balance of professionalism while 'on duty' but, some more deep seeded reflection on Rae's part.

I'm sure the surprise life threatening crisis will lead to even greater bond and progression of their connection.

I can see where you are using Rae's questioning of her life as a lead in to an epiphany on her part. I would imagine followed by a similar contemplative review of his own life by Markar.

Very good.

John

I am sure this experience will bring them closer together.

I love the story! Keep up the good work.

Oh, I absolutely love the new world they're exploring and the novelty of it, and the adventure 3. And finding out a bit more of the Morian background and technology (that tent!) was also a very nice experience. So looking forward to the new chapters, and the events on this planet :DDD.

Hey,

A little different chapter than the others, more cerebral.

The first couple of paragraphs were a good representation of the introspective nature a person could easily fall into in such a situation. An internal analysis of the reason for their conflicted feelings. Rae's military training clashing with her human social needs.

The middle section was nice filler/fluff with the ongoing humor with the interaction in their relationship.

The final part was a good advancement of the story. An explanation of Markar's and his species background. A reveal to Rae and the reader a background, a foundation, a beginning for our understanding of the Morian's lifestyle.

The final phase was very important in my mind. It revealed Rae's personal insecurities, her fear of the lack of meaning in her life without a real personal connection. Hinted at earlier, now stated.

Very good.

John

I actually like the teasing even more than actual thing, so I'm a happy story stalker right now :D. And yay, new inhabited planet *_*. Wonder what caused those scars on the land ._.

Hey,

I really liked the beginning dialog between them. An honest and 'innocent' series of questions from him and rather guarded but surprisingly honest answers from her lent subtle humor to the interaction.

The test did appear to have merit. Surprising that he was the controlled scientist in the experiment. ;)

A question I would have of the results is that it would seem odd that he or his ship's data base wouldn't have all known parameters for his species' chemical makeup. Is her presents for the first time the reason for a change in his chemical makeup? Humm...

and now we have new adventures for them in a new place with the possibility of new tensions to amplifier the current tensions...

Very good!

John

Hey,

Her reaction to the 'attack' was spot on. Her military training coming into play to support a strong woman's reaction to the uncertainty of the male's actions despite her 'feeling' for him.

Very good explanation by her to Markar of what was going on between them. Her own emotional issues over it all were will portrayed. The rules were clear and correct.

Good anthropological comment about the alpha male dominance need when challenged, that he wanted to 'mark' her.

With Jakar gone the entire mood changed. Seduction, strong sexual tension ... but then control and respect by Markar of Rae.

The final line was really great!

John

Analyzing time xD I love it how fast you update! Can't wait for them to meet some more aliens *_*

Such a tease just as I think something hot is going to happen cold water gets thrown. Lol!

Really like it! Hope they take their relationship 2 the next level in the next chapter! ;)

not bad. it would be nice to have the chapters a little more in depth, longer. Use more sensory description to explain whats going on. but otherwise great story so far. ill be waiting for the next addition

Hey,

So, Rae now has a clear understanding of Markar's feelings and an explanation of his actions. Good! But, then the memory fades? Ok, so its now a subconscious memory to resurface later? That works...

Interesting conversation that Jakar had with who? The big giant head? (third rock from the sun reference ;)
So, humm, 'headquarters' can monitor their explorers, huh?

Very good description of their interaction in the two paragraphs. The humor and her realization of what was really happening between them. I like the saliva explanation, great idea, works for me.

That's the fun of sci fi, you can ignore Dr Michio Kaku and most astrophysicists as you wish and define your alien lifeforms in any manner you want.

Great job! Carry on.

John

I love you for this fast update! I need the next 10 ones tomorrow xD. So, this is definitely shaping up to be in my top favorite stories 3

LOL! My knees shaking...so funneh!