sooo funny!

defiantly more

Rae loooves the war room :D. She's so cool as the female role. Love the way she reacts to situations. and possessive Makar gives me tingly feelings lol. So, I hope to see more soon. Waiting for a chapter of a story I'm stalking is torture !

Well, I can honestly say I love Jakar as well, but it's not cheating since I can have neither of them lol. It made me wonder if there'd be a sequel with him (whih would be very welcome mind you xD), or if there'd be a triangle going (personally I find threesmes hot, so nothing against that for sure!) -pervy mind lol

Hmm, so he knows of the concept of love? Poor guy, hormones are really catching up to him xD.

Woohoo, i kinda knew they wouldn't be able to sleep fine xD. And new character appearing soon is always nice.

Hahaha, he just entered into puberty it seems xDDDD. So funny. And I loved how she found her way in the war room. Very entertaining chapter altogether :D

Fufu, flustered Makar is always welcome 3

Omg, I don't know if I would ever be able to explain the workings of the birds and the bees xDDD. Poor Rae. And poor Markar. Did he get excited for the first time ever? That can be awkward xD;.

Ahaha, loved how short and concise his answers were. And his reactions are so adorable. Love me some adorable male characters that can kill with their bare hands xD.

It was nice to get into Markar's head. I love it when male points of view are written to give us some insight xD. And it's usually so hard to divide the female thinking from the male thinking that goes on in the story. Maybe I'm thinking too much lol, but there's a different tone between them.

Hm, had my doubts when I started, since I'm biased towards short chapters haha. But I read all chapters and I liked the story so much I came back to review each chapter again. I was too impatient to break and do it on eat a time lol. I'm not some great writer, so I can't give any good critique, but I can tell you my impressions as a reader who enjoys this genre. For the first chapter, the thing that gripped my attention was the last part when the glass got broken. I was like, what's gonna happen now o_o. So, good job on that. That's how it should be xD.

Hey,

Picky comment ... How is Rae able to get into the war room so quickly? Just like the first time ... and it took him hours to 'fix' it. She has no tools etc ... because there was nothing laying around to be used as a weapon during the guys fight? Huh? ;)

He also seems much more 'calm' (i.e. sexually controlled) with her ... given the short time from the bathroom encounter. Then you have this line: 'It only served to make her feel closer to Markar, as if they were fellow soldiers in the same unit, depending on each other for their lives.' After nearly having an orgasm from him licking her neck? I imagine she is just trying to ignore her true feelings... right? ;)

The rest of the chapter is great, the interactions make sense with plenty of subtle underling humor.

You're doing a great job with this!

John

PS: I'm only given you a little sh.. with the details... ;)

Hey,

I like the idea of them being clone brothers. The interaction between the two brothers was reasonable and allowed you the presentation of a detailed explanation of Markar's 'feelings' towards Rae. Very much an Alpha male protective reaction to 'his' Alpha female. (A very Booth protective response of Brennan)

It also clarified that the reaction to Rae would be common in probably all the Morians.

A small point occurred to me as I was reading this chapter ... if Morians have no experience with females ... why would they use the female pronouns, her, she? I could understand Rae making it very clear to Markar she wasn't another he or an it. But why would Jakar? ... this is his first time even being aware of human females.

I read over the entire story and now understand that Markar's "I love you" to Rae would be his intellectual assessment of his overall reaction to her based on her description of human sexual relations. A logical conclusion based on limited information for his hormonal confused horny brain.

So now what is Rae up to? Should be real interesting...

John

Still loving the story so far keep it going.