Reviews for Vanished
scrubbybubbles chapter 1 . 9/21/2012
I like that you're trying to portray your feelings about how something has affected you, but your urban style detracts from the power of your words. If I were you, I would try to add some imagery to your work, as well as a little less simplicity of language. I know that it took some courage to put this out there, so I admire you for that. Thanks!
HopelessRomantic97 chapter 1 . 9/21/2012
Aww! That poem was SO deep! I love how you always write from your heart. I can definitely fill that in most of your poems. Good job:)
maripach77 chapter 1 . 9/21/2012
I like it...I feel the longing and missing the person.