|Reviews for To Never Fall in Love|
| mypennameisnubby chapter 1 . 12/23/2012
Aright! Cool story so far!
I like how you make the characters contrast so much. The main protagonist is a little hypocritical (she is sort of a ditz). I can't bring myself to like her. I do not know if that is the point of the character in this stage of development. Will that change later in the book? Make sure you know your main character well. I face that same problem with the protagonists in my own story.
Add more of it! (it is not to slow by the way! just make sure everything that happens is ether pushing the plot, setting the scene, or showing the characters.)
Awesome! I love it!
| beverlyamethyst16 chapter 13 . 12/15/2012
YAY Update ;)
Loved that chapter! But so much... What's the word... Suspense? Not exactly but I'll stick with that. I just want them to straighten things out! Oh and her to find out that he actually hates coconut flavoured shampoo now and prefers her strawberry one :P
| isfuathliomgaeilge chapter 13 . 12/15/2012
Agghhh I love this story! :) I spent all day reading it! :) hope you update soon! Would you pretty please check out my story! :) thanks! Isfuathliomgaeilge
| aberlasters chapter 13 . 12/15/2012
Oh my gosh, I knew right when Ari said the handwriting looked familiar that Trevor wrote the note! How cute! :) No wonder he was mad at her the first day... Probably b/c he saw her not caring about the note, right? Or maybe he didn't see, and he was just suppressing his feelings or something... Can't wait to see how Trevor reacts when he finds out (if he does) why Ari's avoiding him and his reaction when Ari tells him the note! Great chapter, I literally squealed happily when I saw you updated this, haha.
| Phantom54 chapter 13 . 12/15/2012
NOOOOO! More chapters! Update! More Ari and Trevor!
Sorry. My freaking out moment. Hehe.
I started reading your story when I should've been studying for midterms and let me just say that it was totally worth it. At first, I wasn't sure about Ari and her attitude towards certain things. But not her attitude towards boys. That was expected. But I loved your writing style so much that I kept reading and, of course, I fell in love with the complex protagonist and the mysterious Rushton. I love cliches. Seriously, I will search this entire site for them. And yours was freaking perfect.
Keep writing, updating, and doing what you do. Because it's fantastic.
I can't wait for next installement in this plot. Please don't keep me waiting! :)
(BTW, P54 is my penname on FanFiction. Not just a random name I came up with on the spot. Though I would do that...)
| steph135 chapter 13 . 12/15/2012
Hey! It's your buddy! Im on my computer so this is going to be a lot easier :)
Okay, so firstly I love that Ari's getting closer to her friend Amber. You showed a lot of bonding between them and have esstablished amber more distinctivly as her "best friend". This is great! In the process of making Amber's chracter more important, you have further defined who Arianna is. (dont you love fancy descriptions? ;P) Another thing I like was their conversation. You could really she how close they are through their words and actions toward each other (Amber pushing Ari, Ari falling to her side of the couch and looking all shocked from Amber's claim of her loving Trevor) Ari really opened up to her about everything! Even the artical and the shampo stuffs! Which brings me to my only critism; why wasnt amber more shocked? I dont know, but I feel like maybe you could make her just a little more surprised on that one but that's just me. If you like the way it is, by all means keep it! :P
Okay, sorry I probably spent to much time on that part, so moving on! I love Amber's little sister! She's so real! all her reaction and action and words, they are pretty much what'd you expect for a little kid :) which is just how you want it. Plus, I just love her personality. She's a little fiesty lol. OH! AND THE LETTER! that was definaitly a great way to mix it up lol. It added a little mystery (which as you know, I love) and know I got to know. I mean my guess is that he did write it but you, ya never know! That was seriously a great element to the story, I mean wow. I like that trevors kinda the tough type,right? I love that he hasalittle artistic side, but he keeps it all secret. It kinda defines him as a chractor more, just like you did with Ari! (this chappie was the chracter development one, huh? :P) another thing; Ari trying to pretend like she doesnt care about the letter; adorable :) I loved that. She likes Trevor, she's admitted that much but she pretends like she doesnt care, but until you she her pick up that letter as Amber's leaving, you know that the letter means everything to her. (sigh) so cute :)
Okay! Now to the very end! Bum! Bum! Bum! I understand her trying to avoid trevor because now she feels all awkward after letting that little bit of information out, now she's afraid its going to come bursting out of her. I lover your description of that-"It was like I was a bomb. I had been so quiet, keeping all of my feelings bottled inside for so long. I exploded a little bit yesterday, with Amber, but I was nowhere near being done. And I knew that if I saw Trevor, I would explode for real. He was the spark that would light the fuse." GREAT EXPLAINATION! :D i mean, that's the exact thing I was thinking! Great imagery right there :P
i felt bad for trevor, but i understand why she was trying to avoid him. let's just hope this goes well for them in the next chapter! im really excited! PLEASE. PLEASE. PLEASE!...post soon ;)
| KaylaHeart chapter 2 . 12/15/2012
Still loving it! This seems like a sweet story so far!
| Guest chapter 1 . 12/15/2012
I REALLY LIKE WELL DONE I HOPE THAT STORY WILL BE MORE HAPPY LOVE IT ANY WAY HOPE A GOOD END
| KaylaHeart chapter 1 . 12/15/2012
I like it so far! I've got some catching up to do, but this sounds like a great story!
| beverlyamethyst16 chapter 12 . 12/14/2012
Awww I am loving this story ;)
If only Trevor would break up with Casey... oh and get together with Ariana!
Can't wait for the next update!
| Guest chapter 12 . 12/12/2012
Hey! Okay so first of all I like what you did in this chappter with the flashbacks. It was really cool to read about all that happened that night that the reader didn't get to see before. Trevor is just so sweet! But I couldn't help but feel alittle bad for Austin, but I felt even worse for Ari! I'm glad she could ge honest with amber though, that showed a lot of courage on her part. Oh and did I forget to mention? SHES IN LOVE! I cant wait to hear what she says about that :P
wow and that stuff about Trevor's mom...wow. she's just fasinating to me lol. I cant explain it, I'm just really curious now! Why hadn't she talked in so long?! I know shes probably been hurt really bad and she knows Trevor has to so shes just super protective. I cant wait to hear more about their past!
And one more thing; ive been reading through some of the previous chappies just for the heck of it and I realised something I should have been putting in these comments. I cant really explain it but I love reading aris thoughts. For the most part she sounds like a normal teenager who's good at describing things right? But about once or twice in every chappter she says something so smart, it pretty much blows my mind. They're either witty ways to describe what shes feeling or just observations about life. Lol I don't know. I feel like you probably have no idea what Im talking about but next chapter I will look for them and show you what I mean :) whatever it is though, its great. Its the kind of stuff i try to but into TNR but kinda fail at haha
But anyways, great work! I don't know if you know this but your at the middle (or climax) of the story now! My finger hurt from typing (cause this is all on a kindle) so I wont explain why I know this now but I will later! Please post soon and know you have fans waiting with me :P
| Amy90 chapter 12 . 12/12/2012
Cute chapter! :D
The best in the chapter were the scenes between Ari and Trevor - there's a lot of tension in them and the way they start trusting each other is just too cute.
I also like that she finally tells Amber everything. It was about time she trusted her best friend!
So the elephant is out of the box and it is spoken out loud:
Ari loves Trevor!
But what will the master matchmaker do with this knowledge?
Can't. Wait. ;)
| aberlasters chapter 12 . 12/11/2012
Found this story today and read all 12 chapters in 1 day... Not healthy. Haha. I love, love, love, love, love the characters you made and how you developed them. Also, the way you developed Ari and Trevor's friendship was absolutely FANTASTIC. I mean it. Your writing is actually amazing, and I can't wait to read more. :)
| Emmeline Alicia Mary chapter 12 . 12/11/2012
CLIFFY! Coolness. Awesomesaucy. CONTINUE!
| call-of-the-mind chapter 11 . 11/29/2012
I looooooved this chapter, like, loved it :DDD I know how that feels too :$ so like I can relate to her story. But if ur french is google translated or smthn, it doesn't actually make much sense, in the context sometimes... Just so you know :) Please update soon!