Reviews for Kailin's Keeper
DarksideOfTheMoon342 chapter 7 . 10/17/2012
I really like it though there's a bunch of typos in the first part. missing words, and such. And I think you mean skepticism not scepticism. I dunno why they change the c to k when they add the ism. Its one of those words that don't make sense. Anyway, I really can't wait till the next chapter. You know how to leave a girl hanging. You're really good at stopping at the shittiest time to peak everyone's curiosity. I love your story. Anyway, till next time, adieu.
Chowdizzle chapter 7 . 10/17/2012
Yay! You updated :) Love it as usual, but its moving along pretty fast which worries me that the story can't be too long :/ Unless there are some other plots which haven't been introduced yet? Do you know how many chapters this is going to be?
Guest chapter 1 . 10/15/2012
Love it :) please update soon!
DarksideOfTheMoon342 chapter 1 . 10/12/2012
can't wait for the next chapter. Poor Lukin will be heartbroken to find kailin run from him
P.Nutter chapter 6 . 10/10/2012
sidbvIWUENVILUEnvilaulibnaiu lverubgval!

Far too much

I keep fangirling whilst reading it! :D

Update soon?
R. Ficst chapter 1 . 10/9/2012
Here's my bookmark. I can't wait to read the rest, but I'm really bad with cliffhangers so I plan to do my best to wait until it's done before I Really get into it and waiting becomes more painful.
S.H. Marr chapter 6 . 10/7/2012
The emphasis on the dominant/submissive thing drives me insane. Your characters are actually pretty strong and well-developed, but you have this stupid...crutch in there, in case anyone complains about them. you oculd say, "Oh, well, he's dominant, so he acts that way." And we don't get enough of anyone else to see how the drive is not the only deciding aspect of a personalitiy. But all we get, aside from very telling actions (which is awesome!), is "he has a very stong dominant drive" and "he's submissive, and it's great when he isn't fighting it".

If you're going to keep all of this dom/sub talk in there, you're going to have to fix this emphasis when you edit it. It's a crutch. I want to say what I think of Lukin's character and what I predict him acting, but I'm not sure you see him as having personality traits that aren't "dominant". Sometimes, they're just personality traits.

Of course, I have no way of knowing if you even read these comments or want to talk about them other than a number never reply to (my, at least) reviews, you have nothing on your profile, and you don't appear to be following anyone else, so I have no idea what you might even be shooting for. I wish I did so I could help you with that.

Anyway, thanks for taking the time to read this and I hope my comments are helpful and you take the time to think about them. I think they're relevant, at least, and one of the best parts of this reviewing thing is when you help an author grow.
DarksideOfTheMoon342 chapter 6 . 10/7/2012
damn Lukin for being a tongue tied moron!
DarksideOfTheMoon342 chapter 5 . 10/6/2012
Woooow! The plot thickens! Write quickly now, can't stand the suspense!
S.H. Marr chapter 5 . 10/4/2012
Ah, obvious jealousy. Obviously Lukin was not part of the contract signing, but I don't understand why the king would stick Kallin as "Lukin's" submissive otherwise. And he's the king. Who knows what HE does?

It is so obvious everyone else knows what's what. I hope you don't intend to drag this out. I know it's sill early and the story and there's a lot that could happen, but don't make these two complete idiots. It's annoying and unrealistic.
Guest chapter 4 . 9/27/2012
I'm really impressed with this story. Adding it to my favorites now.
izziet chapter 4 . 9/26/2012
update soon please!

luv izziet
Tatiana Knight chapter 4 . 9/26/2012
I really love this story. cant wait to read more.
S.H. Marr chapter 4 . 9/26/2012
Yeah, the older princes definitely get what's going on. This is becoming a story of two people who want each other but can't because one doesn't want to hurt the other and the second doesn't know what he wants. Which is trope, but I guess it's kind of complicated with the world setting.

izziet chapter 3 . 9/26/2012
please update soon! i really like this story and i want to know what happens next.

luv izziet
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