Wow, I love this so far, it is very well written, and I like how it seems that Axial and Araz are scheming to get Lukin and Kailin together. I like the way you write about this world, you have a natural way of explaining things, you make this world come alive. You describe things about this world in a way that is so seamless that, though it's your creation, it's easy to imagine this world and these people exist. So for me at least, I'm following along and really enjoying this

In other words : Please continue!

Why are they holding back, I think kailin love lukin an dlukin is very much in love with the younger prince

I'm liking it so far and everything makes sense to me. Keep up the good work. :)

You'll probably get more reviews if you wait longer between updates. You've updated three times within two days; not everyone has time to get to the chapters.

Anyway, hi, there! It's obvious now that the other princes have picked up on the dynamic between Kallin and Lukin. i'm starting to wonder how long this is going to be...

As for explaining things, I think you might actually be doing too much. I'm not sure if I've got an entirely clear view of what it's supposed to be, but let's be honest: no reader ever will, no matter what you try to do. And it seems a little too exposition-heavy at times, which is a problem.

So, this "rek" word. At first I thought it was like "God" or something, but apparently it means, "fuck". Please don't do this. this is a /bad idea/ unless you plan on replacing /alll/ of the swear words. I mean, the rest of this is in English. Why change it for one bleeding word?

Lukin's quote at the end has a typo. I'm staring at it right now and it's driving me crazy. "Your opponent's jaw" not, "you opponents jaw". Please. Fix this.

Obviously, I'm going to have to deal with the dominant and submissive plot holes. *Sighs* Alas. If you eve go back and edit that, look at that. Look at that /really hard/.

Hmm. I have some issues with the way this world is set up, though it seems interesting anyway, and so I am going to dump them all on you.

Even in our world, people have dominant and submissive tendancies. Yet Two submissive people together is freaking adorable, and dominant people usually create some of the funniest snark ever made. Doesn't this ever happen in this world? That loses a lot of what makes the world a wonderful place.

Also, I totally understand stereotpying people by place, that's natural, but are all people from the north one way and the west another? How would they ever find other-oriented mates? Only the people from the middle (or, what, south is this?) are mixed up. That's...that's really lame, dear.

Also (again), are all dominants somehow attracted to any ol' dominant? You implied it when you told us that Lukin attracts random submissives frequently. But dominants don't seem to do the same thing, which bothers me on a lot of levels unless you explain it.

Also (again), wherever Kallin was, why didn't he have his royal guard with him?

Well, if you can figure out how to make all of this a lot less...plot-holey and unrealistic, I'm really excited for the story. Kallin and Lukin both already have defined characters (and we haven't even MET Kallin), as does Araz. That's really good.