AWWWWW! Cute and fluffy and warm, I like it.
You've got an awesome sense of humor, lemme tell you that. It's great! Waiting for more!

Hehe, I like the story. I like characters that are like Kelly. She's funny. And I like it when there's a clumsy character. I totally understand. I'm a total klutz! Anyways, I love the ending. Ok, maybe not love love, but I really like it! "And that's how I got engaged" lol. Ok, well, keep writing. Your grammar was pretty good. I've read some stories where the grammar is just absolutely horrible. Adiós!

This is such a fluffy and sweet oneshot, I feel like I was eating all the candy bars Kelly gave/threw at Danny! XD Awesome, heart-warming, fluffy-like-clouds oneshot!

Loved it! Amazing!
Megan :)

Ohmaigawd, that was so cute! You should make a real story of it. Please?

I love how you turn around the cliché of the best friend not liking the girlfriend at the start, and how they don't gauge each other's eyes out at their first meeting. You let some time pass to let the relationship go south, and I like that.
I also really like how you keep nodding back in the one-shot, and really expand on the relationship between Daniel and Kelly. You give Kelly a very distinct impulsive personality, and that's most definitely a good thing. She has a very strong voice of her own.
In fact, you expanded a lot on everything, which would be a good thing in a multiple-chaptered story, but this is a one-shot. I think you should consider splitting this up into a few chapters, because this would definitely work as a multiple-chaptered story. Take a look at No Longer: that's a one-shot with a size normal for most one-shots, while this one is too big.
Also, I can't help but notice that this one-shot was a bit too clumsy at times. The POV-switch was definitely not necessary and the story would've worked just fine if it had been written entirely from Kelly's perspective. That would've increased the surprise once we heard that Daniel had broken up with Jenna. And the bit after their first kiss was a bit too melodramatic, even for Kelly.
But I loved how there were a few recurring elements - the love confession and the candy bars really made the story seem more like a whole, and they made up for the plot being a bit predictable.
All in all, there's a lot of things that I love and a lot of things that I think need improvement. Long story short, you do need improvement, but the promise is definitely there.
Hope this review was helpful!

I loved the ending. That was my favorite part, where she forgets to say yes.

Ahh!

This is so sweet. So cute. So ADORABLE!

I ADORE it! I LOVE IT! IT IS PHENOMINAL!

I have officially become your fan.

SQUEAL :)

Well, this is your third story i'm favoriting, so i might as well put you as my one of my favorite authors.
But seriously, i really love your style of writing!

Whoah..a very cute story with just the right dose of humour!

"Kelly speaking. If you want to stalk me, feel free,": seriously, I loved that!

Good luck with more writing..
-Cha cha

That's so adorable! You should post more one shots

Oh my flippin' gursh. That was so sweet (': cliché...but I love cliché lol (x
Sorry I'm really slow and idle 24/7, my classes are hard, sports and homework keep an incredibly unwilling me busy.
I've already told you you're an awesome writer, right? Well, you are. :3
-Veronica Marie

awwww... so cute :')

Awwww. It's so cuuuute. Makes my heart flip. :D

Ahh! It would be great if you made this into a long, real story! FSDJAKFJSDA, that would be soo cool! Well, anyways this oneshot was really cute and cuddly. Good work! (: