Reviews for A City of Secrets
Wendy Thompson135th chapter 1 . 12/27/2012
the reigns of his horse and nodded to the king. "Yes your highness I am ready." He said -Homophone confusion: rains/reins/reigns. The first is precipitation, the second are parts of a bridle and the third is what a king does. You mean reins. Punctuation: "Yes(COMMA), your highness(COMMA), I am ready(COMMA)," (AND NOT CAPITAL H) he said...

Some confusion with unreferenced pronouns. With so many male characters, be sure the reader can tell which person 'he' refers to. Even if it means using characters' names more frequently.

So when does King Alexander show up? He's mentioned in the blurb, but does not appear in this chapter.