Reviews for Illumination
dark-fire-rebel chapter 1 . 9/24/2012
I liked it a lot! The rhyming works very to your favor. However, if you used punctuation marks the rhythm of the poem would flow a lot smoother and be better conveyed to the way it probably sounds in your head. Just a word of advice. Overall, I think it's great! I loved your closing lines, "I embrace the air/Take the fall/All is well/In heaven and hell", the rhyming is very good! And the imagery is very powerful. Keep up the good work!