Reviews for Description of a young girl's life
neomyth chapter 1 . 10/19/2012
well written mate :-)
Maybe if you could put up a bit more of her emotions and her thoughts ,it would be a more expressfull . Her aspirations,dreams,hopes are good places which you could highlight more.
KillsWithAHammer chapter 1 . 10/7/2012
umm...if she doesn't reallyy have much interestt in the videoo game u may as well not mention the makes u sound a littlee too...informedd i think...?
ivorygladiola chapter 1 . 10/3/2012
I like it. It's pretty and personal without being pretentious. If I had an account I'd favorite. Thumbs up. ")
0123456789098765432101 chapter 1 . 10/2/2012
Try to make it flow a bit smoother...