Reviews for Grey
staras chapter 1 . 10/20/2012
Nice poem. I like the imagery you put into it, and the fact that you transitioned being in a comforting place with nothing to fear, to the feeling of being trapped in it. Well done.
Natari Mirumura chapter 1 . 10/13/2012
Lovely poem. Especially the last four lines. It really brings out color and depth. Amazing, keep it up :D
AppleCrumble chapter 1 . 10/12/2012
I really love this. I love the description and the way it interlinks together! Brilliant piece! Really beautiful!
Faithless Juliet chapter 1 . 10/4/2012
I think you did a good job at utilizing a very subtle rhyming scheme, which I think works best for the piece, because in a lot of ways it’s a free write and less structured. If you had been more intense with the rhyme then I think it may put the reader off.

I both like and dislike the repetition of ‘grey’ on the one hand it’s a powerful word by itself, but on the other I feel like overuse makes it lose that power. Maybe try and use other words that can also show a feeling of “greyness” or a feeling of being lost in a void which is what I think you were trying to express. Keep up the good work.

Much love,
Juliet.