Reviews for Superhero
kincubba chapter 1 . 3/4/2013
Touching...really touching...
One of the greatest things I've read in my short life:)
MJD chapter 1 . 10/29/2012
Oh my goodness, I'm going to go crawl in a ditch now. Well written... but yeah, I need a ditch.
chris morris chapter 1 . 10/10/2012
Since you were unhappy with my simply commenting about a story's sadness, I'll try to make this one more in depth.

I feel like you could expand the first paragraph a lot, mainly by adding some more specific or vivid memories. For example, the 'I think of the past year... we'll be okay,' part, that could have a greater impact on the reader(and be more fun for you) if you describe the entire scenes where Johnny promises they'll be okay, and maybe in that scene you could subtly elaborate that the main character lost everything.

I was a little confused about the nest that Johnny made for the main character. I'm not sure what you were going for there, and the jump to the conclusion that he wasn't coming back in threw me off, too. Also, I'm unclear on why he's not coming back in the blanket, besides mild discomfort for both of them.

Overall, it was good, and sad. Oh yes, sad, in fact, SO SAD.